rate_review Reviews

Enjoying this story a lot. It's really getting into it now! Draco is coming into it (romanticaly I hope) & I'm dying to see who all is involved in ripping Harry off...Hermione is'nt one of them I think. She just got to Hogwarts so she wouldn't know anyone yet to plan anytrhing with.

Enjoying your story a lot! Hope you will write more soon. It must be frustrating to not have all the equipment you need to do your stories.

This is one of my favorite types of stories. I love it when Harry finds out he was betrayed and something actually gets done about it. I think your premise and story line are really good.

That being said, I have a bit of critisism for you. While I believe you are not a native english speaker, ( I inferred that from your author's notes) you still should use some type of spell check. Incorrect word choices are more easily ignored rather than consistently misspelled words.

Also, you need to think about in-story consistency. In the most recent chapter, Severus and Harry have a conversation about re-sorting and how Harry should have been in Slytherin. This conversation already happened a few chapters ago. In addition, there is the issue with Harry's eyesight which was fixed really early on in the story and then a few chapters later he was dealing with his ugly eyeglasses again.

It is a good story, I just think it needs some finetuning and perhaps a beta.

Not sure how to pm here.

I beta. If you are interested email me pepmart1@comcast.net and we can discuss.

happy to see an update. i am happy that he is going to be resorted and love his new pet. please update again soon i want to read more ....

I think this story has potential, but I've only just started reading it. The only thing that I might suggest is getting someone to read it for clarity, consistency, grammar, and punctuation. I find (for myself at least) that these things make a huge difference in a readers ability and desire to stick with the story. If you'd like assistance in these areas please feel free to contact me.

I'm rereading this story and I remembered something that REALLY bugged me... when Harry got his Potions, Oblivates, and various other things fixed by the Goblins he also got his EYES fixed. But in THIS chapter Severus says that he can't get his eyes fixed till he was 16 and he would need contacts. I'm Confuzzled.... (P.S. I probably would have reviewed the first time I read the story but at the time I had forgotten I had a account here.... And the only reason I found my account today was because of a whim.)

Just found this story. It has a great beginning. I am interested to find out who else is involved in the abuse of Harry, especially from the Weasley family. Looking forward to reading further chapters of this story.

What a great story! I'd like to read more of it. Please continue on with your updates as often as you can.


thank you and kudos!

Great chapter :)