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August 31, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I sincerely give my condolences to you. i too had a grandfather that had bladder cancer and i also would help my mom with taking care of what they needed.I miss him and grandmother but i know they are in a better place now. Keep strong. Your story is excellent by the way. Feel free to email me if you need or want to talk to someone. No pressure though.
Good luck to you and your grandparents,
Jared
Good luck to you and your grandparents,
Jared
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August 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter please update soon. I don't know how to add a story to favourites on this site as i am new to it so could u plz send me a message or somehting when u have finished it, please as i am enjoying ur story. Thanks
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April 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Kinda short but a good plot
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March 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Update soon!
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March 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely like it. It really is a good start. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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March 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great start! Definitely looking forward to your next update and seeing where this story goes. I absolutely loooove Dom!Draco and sub!Harry, and am so excited to have a new story to follow that features them! My only constructive criticism is that you flip back and forth between present and past tense a bit, but not enough for it to detract from your story. I don't mention it to make you worry, so I hope you don't! Just wanted to offer something to think about/work on. Regardless, very excited to see more. :) Thanks for sharing!
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March 3, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start. I noticed a couple of punctuation errors, but nothing too major. I'm interested to see where you take this. I'll be watching out for an update. :D The only way to improve is to keep writing, so I can't wait to see what you come up with next. :)
Rose
Rose
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March 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I think if you would lay the foundation for the story a little bit more it would help readers connect more with the characters. I know it's just the first chapter but give us a little bit more than just dumping the beginning of the premise of your plot without any more details on your version of the characters.
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March 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I love the start of this story. I would like to see more. Please update soon!
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March 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
interesting