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Interesting, I can see several ways this is going to blow up. When he does end up at Grimmauld Place how is he going to handle his "friends"? and at school how is Harry, Sirius, Lucius, Severus going to deal with Draco?

Ok so first off I'm gonna fan girl....OMFG I LOVE YOU!! I love this story and all the other ones you have put out (I'm still working through some of your other stories but I love what I have read so far). This is my first review cause I just got through and I couldn't help myself. Usually I'm a very picky reviewer but I just had to gush. I have to admit to never reading this kink before but honestly I LOVE IT and how you write the characters is wonderful.

My only critique is that when you are doing their "serious" conversations between Remus, Severus, Sirius, and Lucius you tend to have each character repeat everything that was just said just in slightly different wording and phrases; I don't know if this is on purpose or not but that is the only thing I have found myself even lightly cringing towards. But otherwise I love this story very much. I can't wait to read more and be aware that I will be checking everyday for updates.

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Kireania

Yay! Smut! I loved it! Harry was such a good boy for Daddy! And I so can't wait to see how things go with Lucius

OMG i love this story can u send me the updates

Really good chapter. I like how the dynamics change from the adult/teen discussing reality and then morphing into the ageplay by changing tone of voice and speaking as if to a child. While the focus has been on Harry's needs, I have to wonder how much Sirius is affect by this as it also allows him to be the "daddy" he should have been to Harry all along. How much will his guilt of not be there for Harry be assuaged by participating in this ageplay with Harry.

I'm looking forward to seeing Lucius added to the mix as well as seeing if any of those teasers you left us will be satisfied in the next chapter.

Thanks again for a great chapter. I look forward to the next one.

I started reading this with the thought that I would probably not continue as it can be kind of squicky. However, since I so enjoy your writing, I thought to give it a chance. I'm glad I did. I keep going back to the end of Chapter 4. It was so delicately handled, slowly and controlled, so that the reader can feel and understand Harry's emotions in this. You feel his need for what he never had and every child needs and wants.

Well done and I look forward to more.

wonderful! I look forward to learning more about this good boy kink and can almost feel harry's yearning for care and approval from adults. Poor harry, i hope he's able to not permanently walk the super dark path. let's face it, this harry will always be dark and will have his revenge but hopefully not anything truly evil or unable to pull back from the abyss.

yay harry gets two daddies

OMG I love this story so far! The way Sirius brought everything up to Harry was so realistic too, and that was so amazing!

Hey, although I don't take the time to review (looks down in shame and guilt) I follow your stories and love them!
Survivor's guilt, And another life begins, this one, If this is how you treat your heroes, yeah, pretty much all of them...
I have a piece of constructive criticism, and please, PLEASE take it as such, since I'm trying to help and not put down. You use way too much the word "thing" to refer to different... well, things. ;) Don't be afraid of sounding repetitive by using the same words to refer to events, feelings, concepts, facts or simply things. After a while it gets repetitive no matter what and it takes away from the pleasure of enjoying the plot. Same thing with the phrase "and we'll go from there" Every time there is a discussion about plans (and it happens a lot, and in ALL your stories) you use that over and over again. I guess that I pick it up because I read so many of them. Again, please do not feel bad about this and do not listen if you think that's best for you. I'm just trying to help.
To the actual point of my review now. Why the change of Harry's patronus? Although, I should probably finish reading the chapter, you might explain it later on and I didn't get to that part yet! LOL. It's just that the Stag is such a distinctive part of who Harry is that I couldn't wait to ask!
Keep on writing, your stories are awesome (even the one that you turned Severus -my all time favorite character-into the bad guy)