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July 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
There are a few in this story that I was uneasy about - but I have to admit that you have really captured my imagination with it. Are these things that I would ever want to do - No, but the way you have crafted the story makes it is easy to understand why this is what Harry needed. I can't wait to read more. Great job!
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July 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I had a feeling something would come up like that with Dumbledick. Masterfully written, as usual. Looking forward to the next chapter!
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July 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I love your story so much it's so good I can't wait for the next chapter. I stayed up all night reading it. Please update soon.....
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June 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This story is such a guilty pleasure that is kinda sucks that it has to be bogged down with crappy issues such as child abuse. I know and understand it's slightly more believable--because, honestly, what else would have made Harry go searching out topics such as he did, but that doesn't make it any less crappy.
Yes, this is a blow for their trust-factor, but more annoying for me wasn't that they "took advantage" of Harry's altered state, but rather the adults reactions. I guess that's my personal interpretation of the characters being a little more... alpha male? Being sickened, yes; but actually getting sick? I would have expected more angry snarls, possibly fists clenching, sudden jerks from their seats as they set to pacing, even someone punching the wall, while Harry sat calmly in the middle of the storm unaware that his words were the cause of it.
I'm also a bit surprised the Lucius didn't try to get a better time line of the abuse--not just when did it start, but how, what happened, was it always the same. And then, I would have expected him to call their relationship into question--is what he and Sirius engaging in with Harry an extenuation of that abuse? Does Harry honestly want that from them, and why when he was hurt so badly? I could easily see Lucius and Sirius angsting over being compared to that fat lard dead-man-walking. They would need reassurances that what they are doing--while enjoyable to all--is the right thing for everyone.
The next day is going to be quite touchy because of the breaking of tentative trust. A lot will depend, I think, on who wakes up first--Sirius or Harry. If it's Sirius, I can see him possibly holding onto the boy, whispering promises that no one was ever going to be allowed to hurt him ever again, and that he and his other daddy would always be there to protect and/or avenge him; that Harry was his now, and he was here now, and he wasn't going to leave him, abandon him, or let anyone take him away/separate them. He would need a plan to clear his name--obviously Dumbledore couldn't be trusted to clean his own rear end (does AFF censor reviews? Well, just to be safe...), but were there others who were equally as two-faced? What would happen if he went straight to Amelia Bones? She seems pretty straight forward and not a Dumbledore brown-noser....
If Sirius woke up first, and then Harry woke up, pretending to still be asleep but listening, it would give Harry some time to process what happened the night before, what Sirius was saying now, what Harry had said, how the others were there, had seen, had heard, had questioned.... He would probably have an angry break down, crying and shaking before Sirius realized he was awake; demanding to be let go, and Sirius refusing--I can't do that, I need you too much now, Harry, don't you understand, you're mine, you're my good little boy. I already loved you, didn't thinking I could any more than I already did, but I do. I can't let you go, I can't let you leave. You can't leave me, you're mine, my little boy, my Harry, and it's my duty to take care of you, of all your needs, emotional and physical, magical and spiritual. I want to, please let me, let me take care of you, let me help make it better, please, Harry, you can't leave.
It would take some coaxing--probably an outlashing of magic before Harry tired himself out enough to just break down and sob in Sirius's arms, but if Sirius was able to keep hold of him, remain firm but supporting... The aftermath would be a bit sad, broken and detached--why did you do that to me?--we want to help you-- no one cares--we care-- no one's ever done anything before -- we are doing something right now, Lucius is meeting with your solicitor, and we are putting plans into place so you will never have to go back there again, ever, and I'm going to get me name cleared, somehow, and then we'll all be better able to protect you -- it won't do any good, Dumbledore said-- Dumbledore is... I don't even have the words to describe that man, but I want you to take every words that man ever spoke and throw it out the window! -- the window? -- the second story window.
So, there's a chance of things calming down if Sirius awakens first. If Harry awakens first.... He'll still go through the remembering of the night before, but he probably wouldn't stick around for one of his "keepers" to wake up and accost him again. His anger and hurt at being ganged up on, his altered mood being taken advantage of--they're just as bad as Vernon, abusing him, and when he had trusted them! It would take a long while for the mean and angry to calm down before he would even give an ounce of credit to what they had said to him before the questioning had started. hell, he might even take their sick reactions as them being sickened by HIM instead of Vernon, after all, it was his fault for being too weak and helpless to protect himself sooner. And why would Sirius and Lucius want anything to do with him now that they'd seen, learned the truth...? He was just dirty, used-up goods, a little value expect to Dumbledore and the supposed Light as the esteemed hero of the wizarding world. Well, poppycock on that! It wasn't like they could do anything to help him anyway, and he refused to be pitied, and Snape said he could go make a mess of his rooms? Yeah, well, maybe he would. Maybe he go back there and trash the whole place, and then he'd go back to Hogwarts and smash up all the potions classrooms. And then he'd.... But keeping the mean and angry going is exhausting, and tired and depleted, what would Harry do? Would he go back to #12, would he try for the alley and maybe Gringgotts? Get some money in pounds and find a cheap room in the muggle world to crash at? Would Remus or Severus find him first, before anyone else could...?
Either scenario has its possibilities, yeah, so I'm interested in seeing how you play it out. Not to mention, there's everyone else's private reactions--Severus's for not having pieced the truth of it together, Remus for not better protecting his pup--why DIDN'T he find Harry sooner and tried to keep an out-of-the-main-light view of the boy?, Sirius for allowing Hagrid to take the baby away from him, for going after Peter all those years ago, it was his fault this had happened to Harry, if he had just done his duty has godfather then the Dursleys wouldn't have ever gotten their filfty hands on his precious boy; Lucius, because even though I expect the Dork Lord's parties had included children being sexually abused, I doubt he ever participated and that he had no invested interest in those children as he does with Harry, and that bit of helplessness one feels when they desperately want to help but haven't a bloody idea what to do that wouldn't make things worse.
The trust issue is a tricky bit. A small part of me could see them agree to individually sit with Harry and a small dose of truth serum.... but even if they did do that, I doubt Harry would still blindly trust them. Even if his instincts are telling him they're safe, they're good, they can be trusted. Even if their magic is soothing to him, he'll probably always have minor setbacks in trusting them completely, always be setting them to little tests.... It's a bit sad, because I don't think we'll be seeing dopey-Harry any time soon, but it would be nice and fun to see Sirius or Lucius reach that state, and then Harry could take a little advantage of them... That would probably go a ways to securing his trust in them. And then, there's the follow-through. The others will need to make plans, and follow through on several of them. Promises kept, lessons on alternative ways to protect himself, conversations and discussions about what he wants done about Vernon, what will he allow them to do, and just how upset would he be if/when his aunt and uncle die a horrible, most gruesome death....
And then there's the smex, because, dang-it-all, No one's going to be getting any until Harry's issues are somewhat mollified! [pouts]
Yes, this is a blow for their trust-factor, but more annoying for me wasn't that they "took advantage" of Harry's altered state, but rather the adults reactions. I guess that's my personal interpretation of the characters being a little more... alpha male? Being sickened, yes; but actually getting sick? I would have expected more angry snarls, possibly fists clenching, sudden jerks from their seats as they set to pacing, even someone punching the wall, while Harry sat calmly in the middle of the storm unaware that his words were the cause of it.
I'm also a bit surprised the Lucius didn't try to get a better time line of the abuse--not just when did it start, but how, what happened, was it always the same. And then, I would have expected him to call their relationship into question--is what he and Sirius engaging in with Harry an extenuation of that abuse? Does Harry honestly want that from them, and why when he was hurt so badly? I could easily see Lucius and Sirius angsting over being compared to that fat lard dead-man-walking. They would need reassurances that what they are doing--while enjoyable to all--is the right thing for everyone.
The next day is going to be quite touchy because of the breaking of tentative trust. A lot will depend, I think, on who wakes up first--Sirius or Harry. If it's Sirius, I can see him possibly holding onto the boy, whispering promises that no one was ever going to be allowed to hurt him ever again, and that he and his other daddy would always be there to protect and/or avenge him; that Harry was his now, and he was here now, and he wasn't going to leave him, abandon him, or let anyone take him away/separate them. He would need a plan to clear his name--obviously Dumbledore couldn't be trusted to clean his own rear end (does AFF censor reviews? Well, just to be safe...), but were there others who were equally as two-faced? What would happen if he went straight to Amelia Bones? She seems pretty straight forward and not a Dumbledore brown-noser....
If Sirius woke up first, and then Harry woke up, pretending to still be asleep but listening, it would give Harry some time to process what happened the night before, what Sirius was saying now, what Harry had said, how the others were there, had seen, had heard, had questioned.... He would probably have an angry break down, crying and shaking before Sirius realized he was awake; demanding to be let go, and Sirius refusing--I can't do that, I need you too much now, Harry, don't you understand, you're mine, you're my good little boy. I already loved you, didn't thinking I could any more than I already did, but I do. I can't let you go, I can't let you leave. You can't leave me, you're mine, my little boy, my Harry, and it's my duty to take care of you, of all your needs, emotional and physical, magical and spiritual. I want to, please let me, let me take care of you, let me help make it better, please, Harry, you can't leave.
It would take some coaxing--probably an outlashing of magic before Harry tired himself out enough to just break down and sob in Sirius's arms, but if Sirius was able to keep hold of him, remain firm but supporting... The aftermath would be a bit sad, broken and detached--why did you do that to me?--we want to help you-- no one cares--we care-- no one's ever done anything before -- we are doing something right now, Lucius is meeting with your solicitor, and we are putting plans into place so you will never have to go back there again, ever, and I'm going to get me name cleared, somehow, and then we'll all be better able to protect you -- it won't do any good, Dumbledore said-- Dumbledore is... I don't even have the words to describe that man, but I want you to take every words that man ever spoke and throw it out the window! -- the window? -- the second story window.
So, there's a chance of things calming down if Sirius awakens first. If Harry awakens first.... He'll still go through the remembering of the night before, but he probably wouldn't stick around for one of his "keepers" to wake up and accost him again. His anger and hurt at being ganged up on, his altered mood being taken advantage of--they're just as bad as Vernon, abusing him, and when he had trusted them! It would take a long while for the mean and angry to calm down before he would even give an ounce of credit to what they had said to him before the questioning had started. hell, he might even take their sick reactions as them being sickened by HIM instead of Vernon, after all, it was his fault for being too weak and helpless to protect himself sooner. And why would Sirius and Lucius want anything to do with him now that they'd seen, learned the truth...? He was just dirty, used-up goods, a little value expect to Dumbledore and the supposed Light as the esteemed hero of the wizarding world. Well, poppycock on that! It wasn't like they could do anything to help him anyway, and he refused to be pitied, and Snape said he could go make a mess of his rooms? Yeah, well, maybe he would. Maybe he go back there and trash the whole place, and then he'd go back to Hogwarts and smash up all the potions classrooms. And then he'd.... But keeping the mean and angry going is exhausting, and tired and depleted, what would Harry do? Would he go back to #12, would he try for the alley and maybe Gringgotts? Get some money in pounds and find a cheap room in the muggle world to crash at? Would Remus or Severus find him first, before anyone else could...?
Either scenario has its possibilities, yeah, so I'm interested in seeing how you play it out. Not to mention, there's everyone else's private reactions--Severus's for not having pieced the truth of it together, Remus for not better protecting his pup--why DIDN'T he find Harry sooner and tried to keep an out-of-the-main-light view of the boy?, Sirius for allowing Hagrid to take the baby away from him, for going after Peter all those years ago, it was his fault this had happened to Harry, if he had just done his duty has godfather then the Dursleys wouldn't have ever gotten their filfty hands on his precious boy; Lucius, because even though I expect the Dork Lord's parties had included children being sexually abused, I doubt he ever participated and that he had no invested interest in those children as he does with Harry, and that bit of helplessness one feels when they desperately want to help but haven't a bloody idea what to do that wouldn't make things worse.
The trust issue is a tricky bit. A small part of me could see them agree to individually sit with Harry and a small dose of truth serum.... but even if they did do that, I doubt Harry would still blindly trust them. Even if his instincts are telling him they're safe, they're good, they can be trusted. Even if their magic is soothing to him, he'll probably always have minor setbacks in trusting them completely, always be setting them to little tests.... It's a bit sad, because I don't think we'll be seeing dopey-Harry any time soon, but it would be nice and fun to see Sirius or Lucius reach that state, and then Harry could take a little advantage of them... That would probably go a ways to securing his trust in them. And then, there's the follow-through. The others will need to make plans, and follow through on several of them. Promises kept, lessons on alternative ways to protect himself, conversations and discussions about what he wants done about Vernon, what will he allow them to do, and just how upset would he be if/when his aunt and uncle die a horrible, most gruesome death....
And then there's the smex, because, dang-it-all, No one's going to be getting any until Harry's issues are somewhat mollified! [pouts]
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June 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I love this story but wow they just blew a hole lot of trust, especially Sirus and lucius. I mean I understand that they want to help but what they did was almost like they drugged him and then questioned him. When dealing with abuse they should of let him come to them not question him under the influence. Harry is going to be pissed and not very forgiven I would think?
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June 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Difficult chapter for the characters, and I know it had to be gotten through, but dopey-Harry is a hoot! I'm sure the day-after fall-out will be a bit... um, explosive? ^_~v
Happy writings!
Happy writings!
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June 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow, intense chapter which was handled quite well. I'm ready to jump into Harry Potter land and hex people myself. Great job, thanks.
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June 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait to read the next chapter. I hope you have it up soon and the trial...that's going to be a great read.
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June 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This story is fantastic! I like the characters being fleshed out rather than just suddenly jumping in. Keep on updating!
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June 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Excellent work! You did a very good job in describing what sub space is like with your adaptation of Magical space. It's a lot like having an endorphin rush, which acts exactly as you've described, leaving the person feeling either drunk or stoned, and almost completely uninhibited.