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A good Story, unfortunatly it seems, that you have never come around to update it, really a shame so

Wonderful story that has the hallmarks of being a true master piece eventually.
You chose an interesting pairing, and hinted at a route to explain it and you strung together a great plot line with a large number of possible avenues to advance it with.
Minor Ron bashing, but at this point in the original story, the character is well within its age when he is rather insensitive, and thoughtless, immature so it is not really bashing, so well done in portraying the characters as people, rather then fantasy, gives a great feeling and atmosphere for the story.

Looking forward to its next part, and hpe that you update soon.

Wanderer of the Dark
aka
Nicolas Azrael Dragonov

personally i like to think harry is rather smart, if the local bullies have a game called harry hunting then the harry being hunted is going to need to be smart such as hiding out at the local library. an of course if same said harry does hide at the library then he is going to have to read books to keep from getting tossed out. now that does not mean 11 year old harry will be ready to sit his mastery in any subject but he will not be as stupid as cannon harry. an i think this would carry over to hogwarts since first year and second year the group almost lived in the library trying to find out about the stone and the snake. so harry would have loads of time to make notes on spells he wanted to learn. an as far as potions goes harry should get perfect marks in that class since his aunt hovering over him ready to shove his hands into a hot fire on the stove should make a mistake in the cooking that would make snape look like a girl scout since all he can do is cost him house points and give detentions.

as for ron i think the ONLY reason he EVER kept making up with harry was he found out really fast no one cared about ron weasley unless it had to do with harry potter the-boy-who-lived. if harry had been anybody else i think their friendship would have been dead after the troll in first year because you KNOW harry made ron tell granger he was sorry for the whole thing even thou he had no clue there would be a troll. an the only reason ron did it was because harry is the-boy-who-lived a ron at that age would never have said he was sorry. i think it will take years for ron to really grow up and not just trying to fake it to keep harry as a friend.

This is amazing... I love it, it always bugged me that no one talked about Harry's parents even though in the 7th book it says that James was from a very powerful pureblood family

weasley twins could make tons of money if they made cheer candies. what cheer candies are is a candy that can be put into any food or drink that causes the person to say the stated thing every time they open there mouths. best place to start selling such an item is the world cup match. this way krum fans can drug the irish food and drinks to cause they to praise krum and the irish fans can can drug krums fans to cheer for the irish. the weasley twins and lee jorden should be able to sell 10,000 or more of those at that event, seeing as they get to the event about 12 hours before it starts. people will likely be buying 10, 20 or even 50 at a time to drug the other teams fans with. an after that event they can start selling them for every team by owl order an with world wide sales they should pull in a million galleons a year easy if not several million. you figure if there are 500 quittich teams around the world which is likely a low number and 10 games a season per team which is also a low number an a thousand people at each game who want cheer candies then that is 5 million candies a year sold. an if you send owl order forms with the rest of your items on them you can easily double that number since you will have tons of people wanting the candies to make you sick to get out of class or work. selling the snack boxes at the world cup you will have every kid there spending every bit of their pocket money on those to use to get out of class. these candies are also great for those guys who do not wish to have to go see their mother in-law.

I love what you have going so far! You are pacing things well and Harry is very believable. I like that he is standing on his own two feet.

I am excited to really see the plot start and the mystery of who is messing with Harry's life to be revealed! I also can't wait to see his relationship with his ladies develop and grow!

Much Love!

this story is going great! I love it so far, so keep up the fantastic work!

Great chapter! I really can't wait to read more and it's practically killing me having to wait lol. I love how you had Luna in this. Perhaps, Harry could help Luna and Astoria so that they could get into the 5th year one early as well. After all, I see no reason why they would have to take it year by year if they showed they were competent enough in the subject. Astoria strikes me as simply a bit nervous, I'll bet that once she is more comfortable with the class she could be right up where with Harry and luna. Great job again and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Awesome fic so far :)