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Hermione brings back a book at a hen party!!!

Hey! Don't take to heart negative reviews! While there are certainly better authors out there, you are doing a fine job. Some typos and the like are to be expected, having a couple of people you trust proofread is best if you are concerned. You are, in my opinion, writing at a well above average level. Don't let some chowder head get you down.

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I want more please ;-P

I have to admit that I have never taken A levels either. When I was in high school a little over a decade ago, we were not required to take a test in order to graduate. I probably would not have graduated if a test was required. I never took my SAT or ACT tests as I went straight to a junior college right after high school. I think frankly the fact that you had the benefit of a proper English education (Sorry making a bit of a joke based on the fact that English's roots are in England),you had a better start than me! I was edumacated (joke word I use to make myself sound uneducated like many who live in my area) in one of the back wooded western states of the United States. I do have a couple of suggestions when it comes to grammar. I found a couple of sentences where I would like to make a couple of suggestions. Sometimes just feedback from other writers and readers can help improve one's writing.

Look I can

Yeah!!! He kissed her!!!!

I am really loving their interaction and growing relationship. Will there be more soon?

I'm really glad that there are new chapters up every day or two. I'm rather picky about my h/s fanfiction but this is rather excellent. Very nice job. Can't wait to read more.

Isn't it funny how someone who has spoken English his or her entire life can make statements about lacking skills in writing because of a lack of education. I'm sure our difficulty with English has nothing to do with the complexity of the language itself. There seem to be more exceptions to rules than grammar rules themselves. Not to mention that most people these days don't even speak proper English, and thus one must consider that when writing dialogue. I admit that I am not finding major errors, but I'm also not an English Major and have not taken courses in Creative Writing. However, I have recently completed a BS degree in psychology, so I have some practice with academic writing. Just so you know that experience with academic writing didn't necessarily improve my creative writing as they are completely different. The only thing you can do to sharpen your skills is to practice and perhaps read a few books on the art of writing. So, I think you're off to a great start with posting what you have written here in order to receive feedback and improve those rusty skills as you've called them.

I found the end scene soooooo cute!
Thanks ;-)

MLC! Yummy! Keep going, Your idea is relly interesting. I hopehappy ending is somewhere in sight?