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by goldhorse

schedule February 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice to see Sev opening up around them a bit. I think it's good for them all and if Draco's parents end up disowning him, he will need a father figure he can lean on. Since it is the christmas holidays is the room going to at least let them have presents? o.O Great chapter as always hun! Can't wait to read more!
person Kimbovet
schedule February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter! Definitely not boring. I liked their interaction & the introduction of wandless magic.
person anaidra
schedule February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please keep going. Cant wait for the next chapter.
schedule February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Yes! This helped me tremendously! Thank you! :D And it wasn't so much a boring chapter as it was a teaser chapter. :) I'm anxious for the rest of it. :D
person margiere
schedule February 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Intriguing chapter. The wandless magic gives the both so much potential to grow closer. I wonder about that testing facility though. Sounds so dubious. I was so glad to see Draco's reaction to the expected future of the Malfoy Heir. I hope he takes Hermione's advice.
schedule February 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Very nice job! Now Hermione gets to practice something new lol. Draco should be grateful, with Hermione around, they can not only catch up but surpass their class mates probably. And he should look on the bright side, after sitting hunched over studying for so long, they are going to be sore. Then he can use that as an excuse to touch her which can lead to other things he is hoping for! Great chapter hun!
schedule February 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, now you've got me looking at the chapter for clues. Which, by the way, I stink at, so I don't know why I try. lol But, I do think I picked up on a couple things that might have some bearing on his future decisions. :-) Nothing boring about that chapter at all. I loved his thoughts and her taking note of it, without saying anything to embarrass or push him. Thank you!!! HG4eva
person Anon
schedule February 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
ohhh you had me going there- i thought you were going to let them out!! i hoped they would fall in love first so mow there is a chance! :)) yay!
person bre95
schedule February 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Thats all you gave us!!!!!! thats cruel!!!!!! But smart. it makes sure we come back for more but still thats unfair!!! lol Thank you for the update though!!!until next time.
person Chantal
schedule February 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You are legitimately a good author; trust me I edit enough stories to know this.
However as if you were writing a novel for publication, you wouldn't leave it incomplete.
Your work should be your pride.
It seems as if there are a plethora of fans for this kind of genre, therefore finish a story before you post it.
People with lives don't really wait on chapter updates, I got to the end and probably will not remember to come back.
Your goal should be repeat visits, re-reads of this story. So allow your fans the courtesy of a complete thought
before rushing to post it.

Keep writing and do something original, your work has merit.

C.N.