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Ahhh I m so glad to see that you updated the story! Can't wait to read the next chapter :)

Poor guys, hope things start getting better with Lucius soon, please update chapter 20 soon ^_^

I like the story so far, it is flowing great. I also liked this chapter even though I kind of had a hard time connecting with it. The way that Lucius acted and behaved was okay to me. I did not see how it was wrong in the way of how Draco or the rest of the characters in the story acted. That kind of seemed normal to me. I guess what I am trying to say is that affection does not necessary have to be saying I love you or hugs and all that jazz; it could be showed in other ways especially it they are not used to that themselves. Anyways lolz awesome story

This story is very good and u are an amazing writer
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Great chapter!

Yep, Lucius is an ass, plain and simple. I love Sev, but jeeze, does he have to always pull the "your just like your father" card when he's pissed? I wouldn't exactly call it 'running away scared' more Harry's inner Slytherin of 'self preservation'. As for why I started reading this well 1.) There wasn't any new Snarry that caught my interest, 2.) I was taking a break from writing my own fanfic, and 3.) it caught my interest (summary and that it wasn't a Veela fic for a change), so I thought to give it a try. Why do I keep coming back? Well if there is updates at a decent pace (I can understand not every day, but at least you're not once a month) I'm happy, if the story doesn't start going flat (way too predictable, no balance between good things and bad things happening), and the grammar is decent. You have some errors, mainly missing words, I would recommend reading it over as if it was someone else's story and don't allow your mind to put the missing words there as you read. Example: '"I know you don't trust either of them but you are here to us safe." Draco said,...' missing word is keep; there's also a few where you're missing a 'do' or 'do not'. Keep up the good work though, I look forward to the next!

Leania

Update soon!

Why do I like this story? Partly...probably...because I love Harry and Draco as well as Severus and Lucius. Those 4 in various combinations seem so needy yet so complimentary to each other. I enjoy the banter, the way they get so tied to each other to become a solid unit - the loving family they never had. Anyway I think this chapter where Draco seems to be closer than ever with Harry & Severus as well as Lucius showed how much they cared for each other & Draco was very satisfying to me. Severus even acknowledged Harry's caring & efforts...sort of.

"Draco knew how much Harry(1) it when he was dismissive of being unwell but he already felt weak enough in his father's eyes,"
"But I just need to... just be(2) for a bit. And I need you to(3)treated me like I am fragile and about to break." Draco tried to explain; he gave Harry another chaste kiss and left the room."
"To be honest the two times I called him I was think(4)ONLY about Draco and making sure MY boyfriend and child were taken care of."
(1)insert, hated?
(2)insert, alone?
(3)insert, not?
(4)change to thinking?

the small things i found. and other then that LOVED THIS CHAPTER!!!!!
this reminds me of my family and well that's a scary and bad thing to be like. lol.
Lucius is a stupid man who needs to think before he speaks, or he will lose a lot more then he realizes. you can be high strung and arrogant all he wants but these things come at a high price i don't think he is willing to pay them and all the money he has cant ever fix it when its broken and gone. love harry sticking up for himself to snape and telling him off. please update soon cant wait for more:)

I like how you have an interesting plot with twists but stay true to everyone's characters. I like the romantic banter between Harry and Draco and how Harry and Snape are not automatically friends. The sex scenes are written well too. The fight between the four of them was interesting. I hope someone breaks down and apologizes soon, but considering how much pride everyone has, I don't see it happening soon. Excellent update!