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schedule January 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start ... I look forward to seeing where you take this story
person jujukitty
schedule January 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
how you tease me so... i am thoroughly intrigued and wanting to know the hows and whys and what exactly harry's relationship is to each of the three of them, especially after the bit about luc and "his young man". keep up the great work :D
person Kanon95
schedule January 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Very cool start, i cant wait for more!!!
schedule January 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
poor harry sev need his pubic area curusioed! (sp?) more please
schedule January 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start to another story. Can't wait to read more. I find it hard to believe that Snape would hurt Harry willingly though, so I am curious as to how this turns out. Poor kid, that is a lot to handle, and two years with Umbrige? Ouch.
schedule January 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great start. I really enjoy your writing and look forward to what is upcoming. Thanks.
schedule January 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome start, can't wait for more!
person delia cerrano
schedule January 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This is a seriously good plot with unexpected characterizations! Bring it on!!!
person savannah19742001
schedule January 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this story is brilliant...I can't wait for the next chapter. Great job!
schedule January 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM

You're so sweet! You know I don't mind at all - and I love talking to you!



You have captured this very, very well. You've shown Harry's disgust and anger quite well, especially with the feeling he has that this is not the first time that this has happened. With Narcissa's findings only supporting that, I'm very glad that she waited until Lucius was gone to reveal that particular tidbit. This would be a very short tale indeed if Lucius ended up in Azkaban within the first couple chapters.

Not only did you do an excellent job capturing Harry's emotions, but also the gamut of emotions of those surrounding him. No matter how angry he is at the situation, Tom realizes he has to be the voice of reason, and the way you show this with him falling into his natural role as leader is executed beautifully.

I have to say that I do like how Lucius is both enraged and appalled. I do look forward to seeing how he will execute his revenge; I truly hope that Lucius and Tom determine to do something truly vicious to Snape.

I'm looking forward to more, of course! I appreciate that you're willing to write the aftermath of the darker things. Thank you very much for your opening statement. I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter.