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August 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I am truly enjoying this story, and this chapter what an amazing addition. My most common complaint, not long enough :). Of course, it could be three times longer and that would still be a complaint. Incredible work and looking forward to the next installment (please let it be a confrontation with Moody?? That's always enjoyable although I can and will be patient).
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July 31, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I can't say enough times how much i love this story. it is progressing nicely and i look forward to each and every chapter. Thank you for posting an update!
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July 31, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 16
Yay, another update! This story is one of my favorites, along with "Through The Veil." (I think that's the title.) It's good that Draco is starting to understand how wrong some of his actions have been and just how deep a hole he's dug for himself. Part of me hopes that Lucius doesn't come to the rescue, at least not right away, but I also don't want him to abandon Draco, either. Albus continues to make me shake my head and wonder if he's going senile. I'm glad he retains enough humanity to be sickened by the Pensieve memories, at least.
I very much enjoy your stories, but have to admit it took me a while to adjust to your syntax and some of your word usage - like "being" instead of "person," which others have commented on. The one major correction I would like to offer is apostrophe use - and this is something I estimate 75% of fanfic writers get wrong. Apostrophes are used ONLY for:
1) Contractions, such as "you're" for "you are," or "isn't" for "is not," or I've" for "I have";
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2) Possessives, such as "the dog's tail" or "Vernon Dursley's hat." Both these examples use the singular form (one dog, one person named Dursley). If we were talking about two or more dogs, for example, then it would be "the dogs' tails." Likewise the house belonging to the Dursley family would be "the Dursleys' house." The exception to this is possessive pronouns, which never have an apostrophe (his, hers, yours, mine, ours, theirs, etc.)
APOSTROPHES ARE NOT USED FOR NON-POSSESSIVE PLURALS. Harry is meeting with the Dursleys, Weasleys, or Malfoys, not the Dursley's, Weasley's, or Malfoy's. Harry and Lucius are not "lover's"; they are "lovers."
These are all examples I have seen in fanfiction, not necessarily yours. I tried not to turn this into a lecture, but your stories are so interesting I wanted to point out to you and your beta this one error that's been bugging me. I look forward eagerly for the next update!
Yay, another update! This story is one of my favorites, along with "Through The Veil." (I think that's the title.) It's good that Draco is starting to understand how wrong some of his actions have been and just how deep a hole he's dug for himself. Part of me hopes that Lucius doesn't come to the rescue, at least not right away, but I also don't want him to abandon Draco, either. Albus continues to make me shake my head and wonder if he's going senile. I'm glad he retains enough humanity to be sickened by the Pensieve memories, at least.
I very much enjoy your stories, but have to admit it took me a while to adjust to your syntax and some of your word usage - like "being" instead of "person," which others have commented on. The one major correction I would like to offer is apostrophe use - and this is something I estimate 75% of fanfic writers get wrong. Apostrophes are used ONLY for:
1) Contractions, such as "you're" for "you are," or "isn't" for "is not," or I've" for "I have";
OR
2) Possessives, such as "the dog's tail" or "Vernon Dursley's hat." Both these examples use the singular form (one dog, one person named Dursley). If we were talking about two or more dogs, for example, then it would be "the dogs' tails." Likewise the house belonging to the Dursley family would be "the Dursleys' house." The exception to this is possessive pronouns, which never have an apostrophe (his, hers, yours, mine, ours, theirs, etc.)
APOSTROPHES ARE NOT USED FOR NON-POSSESSIVE PLURALS. Harry is meeting with the Dursleys, Weasleys, or Malfoys, not the Dursley's, Weasley's, or Malfoy's. Harry and Lucius are not "lover's"; they are "lovers."
These are all examples I have seen in fanfiction, not necessarily yours. I tried not to turn this into a lecture, but your stories are so interesting I wanted to point out to you and your beta this one error that's been bugging me. I look forward eagerly for the next update!
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July 12, 2013 at 12:00 AM
It's a fabulous chapter and story. I like that the French minister will be hammering the Brit government. It's shocking that Rita, Albus and others got that information. Thank you for writing this and your other stories. You have a wonderful talent.
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July 11, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Glad to see another chapter out! I love this story and hate the wait between chapters. But it is always worth the wait. I can't wait to read more. Normally, I would say "poor dumbles" but in this case, I am more interested in seeing his reaction when he realizes that several of his ideas won't pan out because the option has been taken from him. I can't remember though, has the french minister gotten in contact with Madam Maxime and informed her it would be in her best interest not to talk to others about Harry? Then again, one would think that were obvious. Again, can't wait to read more!
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July 10, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful chapter! A few more moving away from Dumbledore, and Dumbledore protecting Snape. I'm not usually one for having a "bad" Snape (I love him too much) but it so works in this story!
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July 10, 2013 at 12:00 AM
The last few chapters: Very good but hoping for more interaction in next chapters. Love seeing Albus squirm. Hope there will be more.
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July 10, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the update, I have been eagerly waiting for it. I of course loved it and cant wait for the next chapter. I really want to know what the French minster will be doing to Rita and Moody!
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June 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great story. I love how natural the relationship is between LM and HP. Glad he has his godfather on his side now. I can't wait until the dark side has their revenge on Snape!
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June 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I still can't believe my wonderful Severus was so sick and evil!! Story is great and progressing well in spite of it. Love that Harry is sticking it to all his enemies and everything is so well thought out that no one can touch him. For a change he is being protected not a target. Harry and Lucius? waiting for more. Like it.