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"You'd have to get used to that now that there's no more care packages from mummy. *

"That was a comment worthy of the Dark Lord."*

"Fuck you."*

corrections from previous review, don't know why they came out looking all funky.

Let me fill us with Strife and discord
remembering day of old
staring in the mirror I see myself
I see you in me, we see yesterday
You Shadows lurking, me shrinking from madness
Monsters my allies my power my weakness
come and rip the line asunder
Till the time comes and we hold hands
We ache and bleed for better days

Hiyo my pretty writer I send you happy tidings and greetings on this wonderful day. Can we start off and say that my words of poetry is something I have always elected in so when my words flowed and wanted to express themselves and I let it flow and I glad you liked it. The heart of this story is with within the words and characters you weave and the situations they cohere to, you bend them and they bend back and it flows. And yet I feel this chapter was missing something, it felt almost rushed but oddly enough it felt to get a couple of good points across, but I have this feeling that something is missing. When we see the world through your words you manage to convey a certain detail or a fact or even a closer look into the minds of what is happening, or some detail you have woven that we would have better insight into. Weather it was hermoine or draco or even ginny or the others there was an attention that was grasped, an interaction that gave more and added to the plot and story. That was hard to write because I think I'm wrong and a bad review and I don't ever like to tell someone how to do something because your creative freedom is what I like best about your work, and that you are able to think the way you do. Your not normal, your you and always remember that your work is just that your work. By the way very clever of putting yourself in the chapter but it felt I don't know cheap, like a quickie, you felt hesitant, if that even sounds right, or was that just a filler. All in all everything you do everything you write is a plan well thought out and considered.

Tori

Definitely the best chapter so far. I love the fact that Hermione is having conflicting thoughts. Giving Draco a human side to her in that fashion seems very fitting.
It's almost as if her thoughts are betraying her former beliefs in him. Is this due to the groups union? Is it slowly bringing them closer without them realizing it? Is it possible that the magic in the group is creating a bond between them?

Anyway, great chapter. I'm glad Hermione is one step closer to a book and that it gives reasons to have more of Draco in the chapters. I can't wait to see where this dividing lines plot is going...

Hope to read more soon!

Okay, now I understand why you said we were going to hate her. I don't precisely hate her here but indeed, she behaved like one childish girl! Draco & her were going somewhere after their little talk at the beginning and now it's ruined... or is it?
I'm kind of happy he let that out of his chest. Besides, she asked for it, didn't she?
I'm quite sad to know what happened to Draco's mom. Who made that testimony? I guess that's another mystery to solve in your story!

So, that's why Draco got so ill? Just like Hermione, I wonder what he saw exactly while in her head. You didn't answer all the questions, you tricky writer!

The second part of the chapter made me laugh, especially the end! I can't believe Malfoy still wanted to save her but that's good. Good boy, good boy. *patting his head* And thanks to that, we're getting closer and closer to resolving the mystery of the Dividing Line. *squealing* lol

AHHH loving it!! What a great chapter, both 10 and 11! Loved, loved, loved the Blaise and Hermione scene, that was classic!! I wonder what Draco is going to say to Hermione now that he's been in her mind?? Hmmmm?? I can't wait until the next chapter you have me on the edge on me seat!! I am curious as to what Harry has been up to all this time, but I'm sure you have your plans, I just hope you don't make him all "dark Harry" hate it when people do that. Yeah he's always been an angstie guy with narcissistic tendencies but not evil, hmm where are you taking us?? I don't know but I'm enjoying the ride!! Update soon I hope, I've got my fingers, toe, arms, legs, and eyes crossed for the next one to come up in an hour?...tomorrow??..the next day?? :) I'll be waiting!

This chapter was i-n-t-e-n-s-e! At first, I didn't really like how weak she seemed. I didn't want others to witness her weak state and then

This is the best fanfiction I've ever read, and I've read thousands upon thousands. It's VERY good and I check back everyday before I get out of bed to see if there's another chapter posted. You're a great writer - thanks for the wonderful read. :)

Sad, but promising first chapter! :)))

I really like Slughorn's boasting and though she was overwhelmed by Diagonal Alley I think you portrayed it very well - from the earlier feel, to the horror it became before the Dark Lord's fall, and now back to the reconstruction.

I'm so in love with this story. I found it yesterday while browsing and the raw nature of it has captured me! I am very curious to see how each character handles and deals with the others burdens. I really can't wait to see Hermione and Draco interact and grow to trust each other!Please continue this awesome story and know that you've made a fan out of me!