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December 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god. So many emotions. I'm so excited and distraught and happy all at the same time. This chapter could not possibly have gone better. And another one tomorrow as a Christmas present? You are my new best friend.
Oh. My. Wow.
I'll try to write a decent review when I can actually think.
Oh. My. Wow.
I'll try to write a decent review when I can actually think.
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December 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I came across this story yesterday and I read all 17 chapters because I think this story line is brilliant. im just anticipating hermione and draco's first kiss if they have one and its taking too long and driving me crazy gah. keep writing!
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December 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Incredible (and terrible!) chapter. So much in one chapter. Great Job, really. I'm not going to be able to sleep until the next one is up.
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December 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I have read so many stories on AFF and yours is just WOW! fantastic! You are clearly a professional writer as this is well thought through and researched, the characters are all well developed, I love your carefully chosen words and the new wizard lore you created in addition to the original story is brilliant. This is my first review of this story because I just couldn't help myself but keep reading until there was no more to read. Now I need to go back and review your other chapters while waiting for an update. I also have a question. Why did it take you so long to come to AFF?! It was really disappointing when looking at your profile and realizing you had no older stories to tide me over until your next update. Oh well. Can't wait for the next chapter ;)
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December 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wait.... That's not... THE END is it??????????? Oh goodness, please no! I love this story so much!! Hermione can't die!!!!!!!!!
But seriously, Isobel, dying... how sad. I cried a couple of tears, I'm not gonna lie. She was starting to grow on me. Especially, earlier in this chapter when she and Hermione have that 'thank you' moment. My heart grew at least 3 sizes that moment (ahh, a Grinch reference... always worth it). But, in the same moment, a little piece of my brain whispered to me "She's saying her goodbyes."
On another note, this seems like a direct consequence of Hermione's decision to stop controlling everyone around her, you know? I'm not sure what else she could have done, but if I put myself into her shoes, I would automatically start mentally flogging myself for not doing more to save Isobel.
The imagery from the Isobel laying on the ice... ah... Ophelia!!! There is a painting you should see, if you haven't already, 'Ophelia' by John Everett Millais this is the image that was in my head when you wrote "Hermione almost choked with the poetic beauty of the scene." Sigh... beautiful.
Don't stop writing!! It's wonderful!!!
But seriously, Isobel, dying... how sad. I cried a couple of tears, I'm not gonna lie. She was starting to grow on me. Especially, earlier in this chapter when she and Hermione have that 'thank you' moment. My heart grew at least 3 sizes that moment (ahh, a Grinch reference... always worth it). But, in the same moment, a little piece of my brain whispered to me "She's saying her goodbyes."
On another note, this seems like a direct consequence of Hermione's decision to stop controlling everyone around her, you know? I'm not sure what else she could have done, but if I put myself into her shoes, I would automatically start mentally flogging myself for not doing more to save Isobel.
The imagery from the Isobel laying on the ice... ah... Ophelia!!! There is a painting you should see, if you haven't already, 'Ophelia' by John Everett Millais this is the image that was in my head when you wrote "Hermione almost choked with the poetic beauty of the scene." Sigh... beautiful.
Don't stop writing!! It's wonderful!!!
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December 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!-HOWLS IN ANGUISH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh why why why. Right after i say that their interaction was adorable. The chapter title makes so much sense now.
The fact that Hermione could feel what Isobel felt makes it all the more heartbreaking.
You have done what very few authors have the Cajones to do and hit your readers with something this painful. Clever move, having us become emotionally invested in Isobels character and make us wonder how she will grow from her experiences while giving no clues as to how she will do this while taking joy in Her and Hermione's growing bond, and then BAM right in the feel to end all feels. And just like most suicides in real life........we totally did not see this coming. I honestly thought you would do something cliche but very heartfelt and have Hermione lead the Toravasi in some grand display of unity to show the wizarding world that if they wanted to judge Isobel for her fathers mistakes then they would have to go through them to get at her and lay down the law that shit like that wasn't gonna fly anymore.
You have instead broken the mold and ascended to the level of writing prestige that only a handful of fanfic writers have gotten too, in my opinion at least. I implore anyone who reads this to get this story a place on TV Tropes.org.
I am equal part happy/pissed/sad from this chapter.
-Applause-
Oh why why why. Right after i say that their interaction was adorable. The chapter title makes so much sense now.
The fact that Hermione could feel what Isobel felt makes it all the more heartbreaking.
You have done what very few authors have the Cajones to do and hit your readers with something this painful. Clever move, having us become emotionally invested in Isobels character and make us wonder how she will grow from her experiences while giving no clues as to how she will do this while taking joy in Her and Hermione's growing bond, and then BAM right in the feel to end all feels. And just like most suicides in real life........we totally did not see this coming. I honestly thought you would do something cliche but very heartfelt and have Hermione lead the Toravasi in some grand display of unity to show the wizarding world that if they wanted to judge Isobel for her fathers mistakes then they would have to go through them to get at her and lay down the law that shit like that wasn't gonna fly anymore.
You have instead broken the mold and ascended to the level of writing prestige that only a handful of fanfic writers have gotten too, in my opinion at least. I implore anyone who reads this to get this story a place on TV Tropes.org.
I am equal part happy/pissed/sad from this chapter.
-Applause-
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December 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wait wait wait!! How did that happen? few days ago, I came by here and there was no update and now there are TWO new chapters!! Though I'm ecstatic to have so much to read, I have to go to bed now (sigh). Things are pretty frantic with the Christmas preparations. I'll come back as soon as I can but in advance, thanks for the updates, my special Christmas presents!!
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December 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
oh baby cakes....its never fun to kill a character. so sorry you had to do that. i love draco right now, so raw and honest. hopefully you wont have to kill again.
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December 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
O daughter of discord
See with the eyes of heart
How in pain my other daughter is
I have gifted you, gave you love
Yet you scorn the gift I giveth you
Know the tumble, know the scrape
Let us not dance around this
Wallow in this pity, kiss the last hour
I take your only recollection as payment
Of what you had and what you earn
And Mark the hour that is due
I claim my payment
That you took for granted
The heart you no longer shelter...
Wow I am shocked, torn, weary, sadden and hollow. This emptiness this pain the raw feeling of a bleeding heart gripped from the confines of the cold dead body of the reader. I was honestly rocked by this chapter, shaken to my very core of the intensity of this chapter. The rawness the luster of pain and anguish the lost of character the movement of the story it was like a Ballad of the gales. Ever word had me entranced, the connection all of these people share, the pain they felt the courage of Hermoine, the connection between draco and her was astounding. More than I could ever hopw for. The plot thickens, we add to the nature of the war being more than just a villain we have an actual ally now in there being a death from it, or could it be that it might be ron or harry killing these death eaters who's next? What will they do, how will hermoine come out of this will she need to take the potion again will the voices come back. How will she survive under this now losing the one thing she took for granted? Just to say this is one of your best chapters yet, the last one felt kind of like a filler but this chapter sure as made up for it. "minor note when hermoine was looking at all of her friends and she mentions Isobel being there when she's not gave me a bit of a confusion, perhaps a simple indication might help that she's not there instead of after the sentence it threw me off but I picked up steam too in reading. I read the chapter twice and I'm in love with it thanks so much and happy holidays!
Tori
See with the eyes of heart
How in pain my other daughter is
I have gifted you, gave you love
Yet you scorn the gift I giveth you
Know the tumble, know the scrape
Let us not dance around this
Wallow in this pity, kiss the last hour
I take your only recollection as payment
Of what you had and what you earn
And Mark the hour that is due
I claim my payment
That you took for granted
The heart you no longer shelter...
Wow I am shocked, torn, weary, sadden and hollow. This emptiness this pain the raw feeling of a bleeding heart gripped from the confines of the cold dead body of the reader. I was honestly rocked by this chapter, shaken to my very core of the intensity of this chapter. The rawness the luster of pain and anguish the lost of character the movement of the story it was like a Ballad of the gales. Ever word had me entranced, the connection all of these people share, the pain they felt the courage of Hermoine, the connection between draco and her was astounding. More than I could ever hopw for. The plot thickens, we add to the nature of the war being more than just a villain we have an actual ally now in there being a death from it, or could it be that it might be ron or harry killing these death eaters who's next? What will they do, how will hermoine come out of this will she need to take the potion again will the voices come back. How will she survive under this now losing the one thing she took for granted? Just to say this is one of your best chapters yet, the last one felt kind of like a filler but this chapter sure as made up for it. "minor note when hermoine was looking at all of her friends and she mentions Isobel being there when she's not gave me a bit of a confusion, perhaps a simple indication might help that she's not there instead of after the sentence it threw me off but I picked up steam too in reading. I read the chapter twice and I'm in love with it thanks so much and happy holidays!
Tori
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December 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ya just had to do it eh?.........just had to bring on the feels huh?
-does some breathing exercises- Alright you win, Hermione and Isobel, absolutely.fucking.adorable and I am "this" close to shipping those 2 instead of HermionexDraco. Ain't gonna lie, when I read the part with Hermione saying she loved Isobel...my mind went to a slightly more perverted place(wink,wink) and i thought for a second that she meant full on romantic love.
I am sure it must make Hermione feel like crap to realize that 2 months into their friendship she only now discovers that Isobel is the target of bullying. Sadly the post war setting is not going to be an easy place for Slytherins or people with death eater connections. Nice to see her and Draco fall into some kind of peaceful routine as well.
And last but not least, "Apicem"..........oh you dirty dirty writer you lol.
ya know the drill, awesome story, awesome and original plot and relate-able characters. Keep doing what ya do.
P.S By the beard of Zeus I actually wrote a relatively short fucking review hah.
-does some breathing exercises- Alright you win, Hermione and Isobel, absolutely.fucking.adorable and I am "this" close to shipping those 2 instead of HermionexDraco. Ain't gonna lie, when I read the part with Hermione saying she loved Isobel...my mind went to a slightly more perverted place(wink,wink) and i thought for a second that she meant full on romantic love.
I am sure it must make Hermione feel like crap to realize that 2 months into their friendship she only now discovers that Isobel is the target of bullying. Sadly the post war setting is not going to be an easy place for Slytherins or people with death eater connections. Nice to see her and Draco fall into some kind of peaceful routine as well.
And last but not least, "Apicem"..........oh you dirty dirty writer you lol.
ya know the drill, awesome story, awesome and original plot and relate-able characters. Keep doing what ya do.
P.S By the beard of Zeus I actually wrote a relatively short fucking review hah.