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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
OMG OMG this chapter was the cutest thing in exsistence. i was born to read this chapter.
I love this story so much and if you decide to give up on this story like many fanfiction authors I WILL hunt you down and make you write. Keep up the amazing work or I'll cry.
I love this story so much and if you decide to give up on this story like many fanfiction authors I WILL hunt you down and make you write. Keep up the amazing work or I'll cry.
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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
wait they high fived afterwards? best thing ever and may just have to happen lol. great chapter :)
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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
the much anticipated chapter is finally here!! and I must say I was not disappointed. I'm happy with how you portrayed Draco and Hermione's first time together. Too many stories write the first time as being perfect where both participants are skilled at, well, screwing one another. This teenage g-t together was sweet and awkward...very real-life. I really loved the ending where they high-fived each other, just because they are awesome. Thanks for the continuous updates!
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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
So I have been following this story since it started and I absolutely love it, but this is the first review I've posted. Why did I speak up now? I just had to, after the uncontrollable fit of laughter subsided upon the chapter's end. My boyfriend and I high five each other after sex almost every time. I never thought anyone else did that or would even think to do it, so it was hilarious to read that (though we tend to add a "go team" to our high five as well)!
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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I wish I could see Draco malfoy's cum face. Oh what a sight to see. Hmmm oh yes. Love this, so explorative and passionate and yet sloppy and awkward and unsure and unsatisfied in the normal sense of smut fanfics. All those horrible first time stories where they both cum at the same time and declare their love for each other and then directly afterwards he gives her three orgasms and he only cums once cause he is just a G like that.
Right, my hate for the evil Mary Sue. Tell me, besides the silly sport on the broom what does Ginny like? Hermione loves reading and she is very passionate about the freedom of oppressed beings. Ron loves food and sports and chess and is very concerened with what people think of him. Harry is a born leader, he is passionate about justice and he loves flying fast, he believes strongly in family since he didn't had much of one and he is pretty messed up about the dynamics of love since he has seen so much hate and cruelty. He's working on it. Ginny however likes the sport with the broom. She is a blank page. She gets mad real fast, that's for sure and she is a spoiled brat that her mother wanted more than she wanted Ron. I hate Ron as much as the next Harry/hermione shipper but that is cruel to be so mean to the son you wished was a girl. Anyhoo, at first Ginny was this shy thing that hermione was friends with and then after one summer BAM she is this beautiful girl that even catches the eye of some slytherins and she is dating dean and Michael and she is making Harry a blubbering idiot and if it had been a young adult book I'm sure he would have been having quite the few wet dreams. Rowling pushed so hard to have Ginny be the perfect girl for Harry with the whole Tom riddle thing and the whole strong girl with red hair that reminds him of his mummy(which is creepy). She is the Mary Sue to end all Mary Sues. She is perfect and pretty and a match for the savior of the wizarding world for those reasons alone. Honestly, what do Harry and Ginny even talk about?! What the hell do Ron and hermione talk about for that matter?!?
So yeah, I have feelings about Ginny Weasley. She is a silly simple angry minded twat. Who is manipulative and spoiled beyond help. I seriously don't know, besides the creepy mother thing, what Harry sees in her.
Right, my hate for the evil Mary Sue. Tell me, besides the silly sport on the broom what does Ginny like? Hermione loves reading and she is very passionate about the freedom of oppressed beings. Ron loves food and sports and chess and is very concerened with what people think of him. Harry is a born leader, he is passionate about justice and he loves flying fast, he believes strongly in family since he didn't had much of one and he is pretty messed up about the dynamics of love since he has seen so much hate and cruelty. He's working on it. Ginny however likes the sport with the broom. She is a blank page. She gets mad real fast, that's for sure and she is a spoiled brat that her mother wanted more than she wanted Ron. I hate Ron as much as the next Harry/hermione shipper but that is cruel to be so mean to the son you wished was a girl. Anyhoo, at first Ginny was this shy thing that hermione was friends with and then after one summer BAM she is this beautiful girl that even catches the eye of some slytherins and she is dating dean and Michael and she is making Harry a blubbering idiot and if it had been a young adult book I'm sure he would have been having quite the few wet dreams. Rowling pushed so hard to have Ginny be the perfect girl for Harry with the whole Tom riddle thing and the whole strong girl with red hair that reminds him of his mummy(which is creepy). She is the Mary Sue to end all Mary Sues. She is perfect and pretty and a match for the savior of the wizarding world for those reasons alone. Honestly, what do Harry and Ginny even talk about?! What the hell do Ron and hermione talk about for that matter?!?
So yeah, I have feelings about Ginny Weasley. She is a silly simple angry minded twat. Who is manipulative and spoiled beyond help. I seriously don't know, besides the creepy mother thing, what Harry sees in her.
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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
@29 awesome chapter. Update soon.
DB
DB
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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
So here there I was just checking out the reviews, bit of a habit of mine as I am curious as to how other people view this story. Now before I begin, let me just say that everyone has a right to their own opinion and can right whatever the fuck they want, but holy hell 'Aranel', are you sure your not confusing "typical fanfic Ginny" with Canon Ginny? A Mary sue, really? Bella fucking Swan is the Mary Sue to end all Mary Sues,. Now believe me i am just as much a fan of shipping Harry with other ladies, ladies that in some cases make a bit more sense even but Jesus I don't go declaring Ginny as the most evil thing this side of the universe. Now this line in particular stood out to me,
"She is a silly simple angry minded twat. Who is manipulative and spoiled beyond help".
Not to be an ass but that is pretty much everything pre-book 6,7 DRACO MALFOY was in canon. Just because he is sexy and has a 'bad boy on the block' image doesn't mean his faults can be ignored. Ginny for the most part is one of the more decent individuals in the story for the handful of scenes she was shown in. Remember this "silly simple angry minded twat" was for quite some time Luna's ONLY friend and didn't treat her like a freak, defends her friends when people badmouth them, went with Neville to the yule ball(not a big thing I know and it was more out of pity, but sill),Risked her fucking life helping to defend Hogwarts and hell the thing with her and Harry started as a one sided crush from her in book 2 and then took a backseat till book 6 where HE made the first move,broke it off to keep her safe and then hooked back up with her after the fighting had ended, and she was okay with it, didn't pressure him or anything. And I would just love to see just where the hell she was shown to be "manipulative and spoiled beyond help".
Now I will admit that Rowling could really have flushed her character out a bit more and her and Harry do seem to be a forced rehash of James and Lily, appearance wise but Ginny is far from perfect, like all characters in the potter verse she has her flaws. Now as for her mother wanting her more than Ron, well that's a load of crap beyond the locket screwing with him. Now after having so many son's, what mother doesn't want a Daughter, that does not mean she loves any of her children less. Let me just say this in no way was meant to come off as me sounding like a dick, I just get irritated when people shit on a character when the pairings in their mind don't work out and they feel like grasping for straws. Sorry if this rustles your Jimmies but I just felt it needed to be said.
Ahem, now on to my actual review of this chapter. So after all the buildup it finally happened. And I must say you wrote this perfectly, other stories have them being masters of all things sexual so it was a breath of fresh air too see them written as 2 people who know next to nothing about what to do and there is uncertainty and awkwardness. yet at the same time it was still hot. It will be interesting to see where they go from here and your are such a tease in regards to my review questions lol.
-waits patiently for next update-
"She is a silly simple angry minded twat. Who is manipulative and spoiled beyond help".
Not to be an ass but that is pretty much everything pre-book 6,7 DRACO MALFOY was in canon. Just because he is sexy and has a 'bad boy on the block' image doesn't mean his faults can be ignored. Ginny for the most part is one of the more decent individuals in the story for the handful of scenes she was shown in. Remember this "silly simple angry minded twat" was for quite some time Luna's ONLY friend and didn't treat her like a freak, defends her friends when people badmouth them, went with Neville to the yule ball(not a big thing I know and it was more out of pity, but sill),Risked her fucking life helping to defend Hogwarts and hell the thing with her and Harry started as a one sided crush from her in book 2 and then took a backseat till book 6 where HE made the first move,broke it off to keep her safe and then hooked back up with her after the fighting had ended, and she was okay with it, didn't pressure him or anything. And I would just love to see just where the hell she was shown to be "manipulative and spoiled beyond help".
Now I will admit that Rowling could really have flushed her character out a bit more and her and Harry do seem to be a forced rehash of James and Lily, appearance wise but Ginny is far from perfect, like all characters in the potter verse she has her flaws. Now as for her mother wanting her more than Ron, well that's a load of crap beyond the locket screwing with him. Now after having so many son's, what mother doesn't want a Daughter, that does not mean she loves any of her children less. Let me just say this in no way was meant to come off as me sounding like a dick, I just get irritated when people shit on a character when the pairings in their mind don't work out and they feel like grasping for straws. Sorry if this rustles your Jimmies but I just felt it needed to be said.
Ahem, now on to my actual review of this chapter. So after all the buildup it finally happened. And I must say you wrote this perfectly, other stories have them being masters of all things sexual so it was a breath of fresh air too see them written as 2 people who know next to nothing about what to do and there is uncertainty and awkwardness. yet at the same time it was still hot. It will be interesting to see where they go from here and your are such a tease in regards to my review questions lol.
-waits patiently for next update-
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January 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
YAY NEW CHAPTER!
I commend you on your latest victory!
It's nice to see a fluffy honest chapter. Max is still a hoe though.
Now I'm left wondering what's going to happen next really.
Luna is hilarious, sounds like something I would say just to make an awkward conversation
or moment. I think I'll do just that tomorrow at work.
I await your next chapter as a hungry dog anticipates a bloody steak. Depending on the content of said chapter
it may just be as messy, in a different context in a sense of the words. :D
Much love and huggles.
-Ariisha
I commend you on your latest victory!
It's nice to see a fluffy honest chapter. Max is still a hoe though.
Now I'm left wondering what's going to happen next really.
Luna is hilarious, sounds like something I would say just to make an awkward conversation
or moment. I think I'll do just that tomorrow at work.
I await your next chapter as a hungry dog anticipates a bloody steak. Depending on the content of said chapter
it may just be as messy, in a different context in a sense of the words. :D
Much love and huggles.
-Ariisha
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January 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I loved this chapter. It was so good. I am still smiling thinking of it. And I had to laugh when I read Luna's respond to Blaise :D.
I am glad things with Isobel and Hermione are alright. And that Draco and Hermione seems to be more at ease.
Anyway, thank you for you reply to my last review ;). I understand that it might not be the most interesting thing to do...especially if there is someth...no no...someone there for you :D.
I am glad things with Isobel and Hermione are alright. And that Draco and Hermione seems to be more at ease.
Anyway, thank you for you reply to my last review ;). I understand that it might not be the most interesting thing to do...especially if there is someth...no no...someone there for you :D.
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January 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Have you missed me well I've missed you. Well I have been a fan of you since you started your story, simply because of how real the story is. Its what drew me to it so I decided to sit and see where it would go. To put it simply I have not ever been disappointed. You have not fallen into a trap of trying to please us but more so trying to make the story speak for itself. Which has been your crowning moment, never lose sight of what you want to make happen. I've been a silent reader for the last couple of chapters watching the ebb and flow of the story take place. The emotional tension, the passionate tension with another woman, crafty. Its all nice an all but its like the calm for the storm. So I sat on my review, thinking of what to say of how to say it. and don't worry you will get poetry don't worry.
Silence your whimpering
As we descend from madness
dive deeper to truth
collapse the walls
that chain the fates
worship thy heart
beating in sadness
I've been reading and reading your work piecing together the clues of madness, oh your good very good. I'm sitting here thinking like this is one hell of a writer. The ebb and flow of the characters I'm waiting for draco to flip out and the confrontation between him harry and ron. I want to know where the hell is ron and has he lost it too or just doesn't want to be bothered. God can I tell you I read everything I come across and this is the only story that has me sitting and piecing the puzzles together. The ebb and flow of the last couple chapters are like the calm before the storm. I can almost tell your wrting but when I think I've got it you throw a curve ball and I'm off my game but in a good way. Which gets me to my next bit of business, I love your writing so much its more than hero worship its respect because your style is so unique. I envy but respect that in your work, that it can inspire even the worst of us who are not writers to be inspired. I want to thank you because my next bit of words are for you and all the other admires and readers out there to hear this. Your work has inspired me to write my own story, and to practice my writing using fan-fiction. I have been told I cannot write, I have dyslexia and and other disabilities and often times bullied. I have risen above it and became an artist but left my writing behind for judgement and being told I often lose sight of my writing or miss my mark. I have been inspired to write and I wanted to say thank you. So please look out for a story called "Outside of Order" and I hope you'll be a good reviewer to me...Can't wait for the next chapter.
tori
sadebrown21@yahoo.com
Silence your whimpering
As we descend from madness
dive deeper to truth
collapse the walls
that chain the fates
worship thy heart
beating in sadness
I've been reading and reading your work piecing together the clues of madness, oh your good very good. I'm sitting here thinking like this is one hell of a writer. The ebb and flow of the characters I'm waiting for draco to flip out and the confrontation between him harry and ron. I want to know where the hell is ron and has he lost it too or just doesn't want to be bothered. God can I tell you I read everything I come across and this is the only story that has me sitting and piecing the puzzles together. The ebb and flow of the last couple chapters are like the calm before the storm. I can almost tell your wrting but when I think I've got it you throw a curve ball and I'm off my game but in a good way. Which gets me to my next bit of business, I love your writing so much its more than hero worship its respect because your style is so unique. I envy but respect that in your work, that it can inspire even the worst of us who are not writers to be inspired. I want to thank you because my next bit of words are for you and all the other admires and readers out there to hear this. Your work has inspired me to write my own story, and to practice my writing using fan-fiction. I have been told I cannot write, I have dyslexia and and other disabilities and often times bullied. I have risen above it and became an artist but left my writing behind for judgement and being told I often lose sight of my writing or miss my mark. I have been inspired to write and I wanted to say thank you. So please look out for a story called "Outside of Order" and I hope you'll be a good reviewer to me...Can't wait for the next chapter.
tori
sadebrown21@yahoo.com