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I've said it before and I'll say it again...
BLOODY BRILLIANT!

I love the concept...love the story but most of all...

I LOVE THE FACT THAT YOU ARE KEEPING IT IN HERMIONE'S POV!!!

Much of the FanFic I've read is good. Some are VERY good and a few are GREAT!

But even with the great ones, there is the thing editors refer to as "head hopping" where the POV changes almost from paragraph to paragraph.

The fact that you are doing a FANTASTIC job of keeping to Hermione's POV is the mark of an extremely good writer. The only clues that the reader gets as to Snape's feelings about what is going on is through her eyes. We find out as she does and we discover things about the character only as she does.

That is what makes this story so truly addictive.

I don't know if you realize it, but that is exactly what JK Rowling did with the original series. The reader NEVER knew anything before Harry did...we may have suspected things, but until Harry discovered a missing piece of the puzzle, we didn't know for certain.

Bravo!

Now...having said all of that...Will you PLEASE write faster? LOL

Also...I gotta wonder if the D2 is going to work anything like the "panties" did.

I think it would be really interesting if HE could actually FEEL what the 2nd phallus was doing...like LITERALLY having...well, 2 cocks. It IS called "D2" and involves double penetration

It would be only fair for HIM to get an unexpected surpise. (evil grin)

I'd LOVE to see him try to keep his composure through that in the workshop...

Keep writing and keep up the GREAT work!

-S

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Even with the speed you can create and give us (generously I might add) two chapters in a short period of time, the quality, the characters, the situations are just excellent. How well you portrayed Severus as a hard core reluctant to share his personal life character; I do enjoy the puzzling stories behind the difficult man; Also Hermione with curiosity and moments of candid maturity and spontaneity. Just adore your story, event the taboo subject of anal is well described and actually accurate, a lot of preparation is needed.
My dear, as always you are doing a great job and kudos for being such a fantastic and creative writer. Your imagination knows no boundaries

Well, I would say either you are VERY well read, or that was not your first time "instructing" either. :-) Strangely enough, the clinical-ness of his actions and explanations helped me get through it, too. lol I can't wait to find out what his dysfunction is, though. Since he is obviously not turned off by her, and seems to be over the "former student" thing, I can't for the life of me figure out why he can't seem to relax and let himself enjoy things. Not to mention, she might be less annoying to him if he stopped treating her like a his world's biggest pain in the ass. And, she has got to get over thinking of him like her teacher and start seeing the man he is. Maybe then she wouldn't be so freaked out about it all and could relax a bit more and not be such a pain to him. Oh what a circle! lol Thank you, HG4eva

Oh dear.... I do believe the dear boy is beginning to become unhinged by Hermione... Must have more!

You know what? Your Snape is absolutely believable.
In that one chapter you had him being a complete ass, making Hermione practically beg to stay at his place, knowing full-well she had nowhere else to go - such a Snape move. But then he LETS her stay and covers her ass with that D2 thing, also a very Snape way to go about showing he's not a complete jerk.
I'll admit, I got a bit embarrassed for Hermione at Spinner's End - and then I got angry at her. Lol. It's just, she's too proud to admit to her best friend that she's homeless, but she's not too proud to ask Snape to stay at Spinners End...? And then, on top of that she lingers and has a bath there! I just think... She's lost so much already, even quite a lot of her dignity in taking that job (considering the person she is), I thought she'd cling to whatever dignity she had left. You don't address it as much as the sex, but I feel so sorry for Hermione and her situation.

I just can't be anything but jealous of the fact that Hermione has the best fucking job ever! lol. I especially enjoyed the part in this chapter where he's so nonchalant about touching her after the fur is gone haha. He's definitely not the typical man is he? Can't wait to read more of this amazing story!

Okay, I am past intrigued as to how he is able to be so darned stoic about it all! WTH?! I was glad to see that plucking her petals got him excited enough to finish the job, but baffled with how he could so easily stop and be back to clinical. It's kind of eerie. I wonder if he will lose a little of his vaulted control while teaching her more back at his place. I feel so badly for her in all her losses, but I am glad to know she has people who care, like Molly. Very interested in seeing how the rest of their night goes, despite it being a personal "exit only" thing for me. lol Thank you, HG4eva

First off, your email alerts are UBER appreciated. I'm so glad that you've begun updating this again; some of your product ideas are bloody wonderfull! I LOVED the two in this chapter. Because really, there's nothing better than Hermione getting teased by Snape. We don't care if he's mean and snarky, just so long as he's not actively indifferent. ;)

Really looking forward to this next chapter. Anal play and DP, oh my! :3

Oh, absolutely fantastic! I can't wait for the next chapter, a lot of promise XD