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October 15, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Oh a new chapter!! *does a happy dance* I'm sorry you had some pesky reviewer that said all the wrong things, but let me just tell you how excited I am to see this pop back up on the first page. I understand about having too little time, though I don't do all you are, I do have a full time job working 50 hours a week...when there are no call outs. I'll be patient but just remember you have a lot of understanding readers. Anxious for more of this story!
Leania
Leania
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October 14, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Sorry to say but I found an error. The story takes place 1997 am I right. Minor detail Euro's were introduced in 2001.
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October 14, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This story has been one of my favs for a long time. It's been out there in WIP-limbo, but I try to check on it every now and again. I know that work/school/life can suck all of the energy out of you so I have tried to just be patient and wait. This, though, (squeals incoherently) I've been *waiting* for Dom!Harry (see what I did there?) to meet some of his family. I'm so glad that he has Jaden, and hopefully now his parents' extended family.
This story is a funny one for me because it's the opposite of how I normally read. In *this* one the sex is lovely, but I'm more interested in Harry's family. Don't get me wrong, I think his mates are adorable. It's just that you've made his family story so tragic and heartbreaking. There are his parents who have been driven mad by the damage done to their bond. Then there is the Darkwing family who have been missing, and longing for, their missing members for almost twenty years. I can't even imagine how devastating that would be for Harry's grandparents, aunts and uncles.
(I'm hoping that Harry welcomes Alstair with open arms. I'm feeling sorry for him, poor darling.)
This story is a funny one for me because it's the opposite of how I normally read. In *this* one the sex is lovely, but I'm more interested in Harry's family. Don't get me wrong, I think his mates are adorable. It's just that you've made his family story so tragic and heartbreaking. There are his parents who have been driven mad by the damage done to their bond. Then there is the Darkwing family who have been missing, and longing for, their missing members for almost twenty years. I can't even imagine how devastating that would be for Harry's grandparents, aunts and uncles.
(I'm hoping that Harry welcomes Alstair with open arms. I'm feeling sorry for him, poor darling.)
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October 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 18
"I have gone back and edited chapter 3, dear person who has made multiple accounts to tell me how bad I messed up over and over again. Hopefully it meets your standards."
I can only assume you are referring to me, since I haven't noticed anyone else offering critique on that chapter. Well, not on AFF, at least. I'm not sure what you mean by "made multiple accounts to tell [you] how bad [you] messed up over and over again," however. It's true that I am a member of two other HP fansites, and I suppose it's possible that I've left more or less the same review on one or both of them if you posted to those sites. That would certainly account for the deja vu feeling as I was writing this one, but I figured it must have been from my comments on the original version. But I hope you don't truly believe that I joined these sites solely for the purpose of criticizing your story, because that's just . . . well, not true. I am very sorry if my comments made you "feel like shit" because that was certainly not my intention. I thought I was offering a helpful critique. I went back and re-read Chapter Three, which now makes sense though I'm sorry it caused you so much stress. And now that I know what an insane schedule you're leading, between jobs, health issues, etc., I promise no more critiques or corrections.
"I have gone back and edited chapter 3, dear person who has made multiple accounts to tell me how bad I messed up over and over again. Hopefully it meets your standards."
I can only assume you are referring to me, since I haven't noticed anyone else offering critique on that chapter. Well, not on AFF, at least. I'm not sure what you mean by "made multiple accounts to tell [you] how bad [you] messed up over and over again," however. It's true that I am a member of two other HP fansites, and I suppose it's possible that I've left more or less the same review on one or both of them if you posted to those sites. That would certainly account for the deja vu feeling as I was writing this one, but I figured it must have been from my comments on the original version. But I hope you don't truly believe that I joined these sites solely for the purpose of criticizing your story, because that's just . . . well, not true. I am very sorry if my comments made you "feel like shit" because that was certainly not my intention. I thought I was offering a helpful critique. I went back and re-read Chapter Three, which now makes sense though I'm sorry it caused you so much stress. And now that I know what an insane schedule you're leading, between jobs, health issues, etc., I promise no more critiques or corrections.
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October 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
So glad you are back!!! Loved this chapter, think it was a great way to bring Ron close to his mates and Harry close to his family. Can
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October 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 3
I remember the original version of this, and you've done a good job of fleshing out the story and characters. However . . .
"At the time there was nothing I could do and I had to [no]* proof of foul play. It was also around this time that whispers [began]* of a man named Tom Riddle who had taken the role of the menace Lord Voldemort, but no one could really remember much about him other than that he was dangerous. You can see how this seemed odd to me and the other goblins, but as I said there was no proof and nothing that could be done.
I remember the original version of this, and you've done a good job of fleshing out the story and characters. However . . .
"At the time there was nothing I could do and I had to [no]* proof of foul play. It was also around this time that whispers [began]* of a man named Tom Riddle who had taken the role of the menace Lord Voldemort, but no one could really remember much about him other than that he was dangerous. You can see how this seemed odd to me and the other goblins, but as I said there was no proof and nothing that could be done.
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October 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Loved the update.
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October 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I love your story this is defently different then any story I have read I don't see I problems your writing is fine great job on this idea and putting it in writing
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October 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 12
Whew! This chapter and the previous one were . . . wow! Well done. I've read about sounding done with toys, but never with a finger - even a pinky. Doesn't sound appealing to me! *g*
Whew! This chapter and the previous one were . . . wow! Well done. I've read about sounding done with toys, but never with a finger - even a pinky. Doesn't sound appealing to me! *g*
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October 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 13
Great battle scene! Go, Charlie!
"...Stigus Mortinson was impossible to find. It seemed his brothel, office, and home didn
Great battle scene! Go, Charlie!
"...Stigus Mortinson was impossible to find. It seemed his brothel, office, and home didn