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for No Obvious Truths

by Danyealle

schedule May 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter, I love the idea of the cat for Harry and making the dragons actually able to fly. "Of the fuzzy dragon" was just funny. Great job hun. Can't wait to read more and once again, I am glad someone finally cares about Harry ^^
person tkykitty
schedule May 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
So happy I found this amazing story by chance! I can't wait till chapter 14 comes out. I love the family feel and the adventure feel. I'm worried about ablus. I hope sev and draco look out for Harry in slytherin. I know they will. Hehehe. Great chapter again.
person Jan
schedule May 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Lol, naturally the two extra wands belong to Harry's future mates, that was a nice touch ^_~

Please update chapter 14 soon :)
person GoddessonmyKnees
schedule May 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. I am so glad Harry is going to get sorted. It will also be funny to see how Dumbles reacts.

Can't wait for more.
person psychosmurf
schedule May 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ch 13: Glad Harry gets to have some of the normal experiences.
person ChaosLady
schedule May 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful two chapters!
schedule May 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter as always hun. I loved the idea of the 3 wands vs. just Harry and Tom's. Great idea to let Harry still be parts of things. Can't wait to read more! How does Minerva know what is going on with Harry though? I thought all she was aware of was that his guardians weren't mentioned while Dumbles knew about Harry being sick.
person Quaff
schedule May 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story. Thank you for writing it.
person nox_lumen
schedule May 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
WARNING: concrit, but no flames!

Plot wise, you have a very good concept to start. Writing style, on the other hand? You have a lot of room for improvement. Your characters tend to be redundant, both in speech and thought, frequently saying the same phrases quite often in a very short space, with little to no change in wording. When 4-5 adults and a child all tell Harry the same thing within new statements being added to a chat, rather then strengthening the statement, it can make the readers mind stop noticing what you were trying to stress and this is why intentionally writing repetition has understandably not been in fashion since Heian era Japan. As a result, though you appear to have a fuller looking chapter, many chapters have so much filler in the end that they would have been more satisfying to read as one rather than several installments. I strongly recommend that after you work out this version you take the time to go back over it and try to take out much of the extra phrases and perhaps even compress a few chapters.
person Anon
schedule April 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. I want to beat Dumbles with a stick.

Can't wait for more.