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The new chapter was great, but you put it in the wrong order on your index. The last chapter on your index is a chapter I had read before. The new chapter is labeled as chapter 24, the next to last chapter on your index.

This was a decent read. Acceptable for me with a slight tilt towards Exceeds Expectations. Largely acceptable. The sub plots expanded are nice however it has largely become a misnomer in that it is supposed to be a drarry and since they have been resolved to your satisfaction you barely mention them. My suggestion is to switch the focus to being a multi pairing focused fic (and name them. Or to merely have the plot be centred on the Lilithean situation and how to solve it, rather than go for drarry exclusively.

If you wanted to make this a drarry centred fic and not get lost in all the sub-plots, remember, just because one is pregnant, married, and lives their partner does not mean that all is fine and rosy for the rest of their lives. Couples have to get accustomed to each others habits both good and bad. E.g. one is a order focussed person and the other is a mess master. They have to come to some sort of compromise in order to Co-habit successfully. Marriage is the beginning of the story, not the end. Learning how to argue without digging into sensitive topics, how to forgive each others mistakes and how to be the grave where your other half's faults lay are all essential parts of a marriage. This doesn't always come easily, sometimes it takes a lot of time and patience to change.a person. It take a lot of time and patience to change bad habits WE have as individuals so who is to say ones partner is not going to take the same time or longer than we do to.get rid of their bad habits.

Nice story, I always look forward to an update. I do have a question however, I thought Lucius will be with Amelia and Severus is with Remus? It may be a typo but at the beginning of this chap you have pairings listed as LuciusxSever just wondering if you changed your mind. Looking forward to your next updat.

Update soon!

Actually, I've been searching for it on ff.net and can't seem to find it. I've searched by author (both of you) and by title and not been able to find it. Is your co-author's name listed differently on ff.net than how you are listing it in this fic? Thanks and looking forward to further updates on many of your fics. I have you favorited on ff.net because I like many of your fics.

That was entirely too short!

I'm enjoying this fic and would like to check out your collaboration fic, Chosen Darkness, but have been able to find it either by title or by author's names. I've tried both your pen name and your cowriter's. Any help would be appreciated.

Outstanding. I like their plans for the Cannons.

I'm begining to like Lavender. Poor thing stuck with Ron but maybe she could shape him up. Realoly like Brecc & George...so sweet. Remus is so good for Severus. After Sev's childhood he needs cuddling & spoiling (but he doesn't need to act like a brat). More Draco & Harry please...love how good they are to each other & together.

They have more than enough people for a team. So why do they not found their own team instead of buying out the Canons?