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Danyealle

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Plz finish this story....it's wonderful

This story is so sweet and wonderful! I hope you continue and update soooonnn!

I'm kind of appalled at the very tactless and insensitive way that "the gays" were outed first thing in the first chapter like that. Just can't get past it, I'm sorry :/

Read it, and it's interesting. HOpe things turn out ok for both boys. Update again soon please.

You're really losing me in this sex scene. You said Draco came and sat on the bed. Then they were suddenly on a wall and back on the bed? And he went from being "huge" to having a slender waist and their being no space in between himself and Harry.

Also, in previous chapters there were 2 beds and now one queen sized bed. I never presumed the other beds to be queen sized since you said they were side by side.

wow! So much fluff even my sweet tooth was aching lol.

"You have beautiful porcelain skin that sparkles in the sun" <--- this though... Twilight... Twilight should never be mixed with Harry Potter... EW on this quote!

*Squeals* I love this story! It's amazing and so funny and cute. Harry and Draco are beyond adorable with each other, and I don't want to say too much bc I know that sometimes I look at reviews b4 reading a story, but I just have to say this story is so awesome. I'm so excited to read more! It's such a unique idea and I love how you write; all the details are wonderful! I can't wait for more :)

I like the idea and plotting process you are planning for this story. It's one of those things I've always wondered about in the harry potter universe and I'm glad you've written a story about it. I'd like to point out that the dialogue of the characters, especially McGonagall's is very out of character and thus make its very hard for me to keep interest in the story. Not to say I haven't read every chapter, but the speed in which you are writing this and their dialogue seems a bit rushed and American. The out of characterness makes it hard for anyone to relate and makes it less interesting. Needless to say I have read all your chapters and I really would like to see where you are going with his. Your very talented on keeping the story fluffy, happy and fun (which is what I suck at). My only suggest you go back, read it out loud and maybe try to flesh out the characters and build up to those scenes rather than just lay it all out there.

I hope you don't take offense to my post and only see it as constructive criticism. Please don't take my words to heart, keep in mind that this is your story not mine. Eitherway good luck and I really hope to see more of Marriage 101. If you need a beta or any suggestions for your writing, I would be happy to help.