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September 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I have found this story to be very interesting. However, it does seem a bit rushed - I have always had questions like why didn't Snape go after Harry after Draco was in prison? I understand why the Order has gone through the trouble of trying to break up Harry/Draco but when the outside ppl find out that Harry is claiming him, they seem to not care. I would give a damn if the most powerful man alive was after the man I was currently hurting.
Why has Harry not gone to the papers to ask for help looking for his child or at the very least hiring tons of private detectives, or better yet telling the Minister of Magic that if he and his cronies don't get their puts in gear and find his child, he will destroy them politically, socially and financially. HE should know the plan since it started with the Order. Someone had to be coordinating it.
The other thing I notice is that you haven't really incorporated magic into the story where it would be better. Like Draco's physical therapy. Surely there but be pain potions are spells to help, Draco through, they have spells to regrow bones surely there is something for this.
And finally when Harry questions people he just takes their word for it. The Nurse says she does remember the man name and gives them some form of a name and Harry then erases her members. But really shouldn't Harry have turned her over to Snape to rip through her memories, to see the exact conversation. Maybe they will recognize the man, the place. Maybe he said something in passing that was a clue. Or maybe she was lying and just got away. What about a truth potion.
Why has Harry not gone to the papers to ask for help looking for his child or at the very least hiring tons of private detectives, or better yet telling the Minister of Magic that if he and his cronies don't get their puts in gear and find his child, he will destroy them politically, socially and financially. HE should know the plan since it started with the Order. Someone had to be coordinating it.
The other thing I notice is that you haven't really incorporated magic into the story where it would be better. Like Draco's physical therapy. Surely there but be pain potions are spells to help, Draco through, they have spells to regrow bones surely there is something for this.
And finally when Harry questions people he just takes their word for it. The Nurse says she does remember the man name and gives them some form of a name and Harry then erases her members. But really shouldn't Harry have turned her over to Snape to rip through her memories, to see the exact conversation. Maybe they will recognize the man, the place. Maybe he said something in passing that was a clue. Or maybe she was lying and just got away. What about a truth potion.
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August 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is such a sad and interesting story. I'm glad they were able to rescue Draco from the Azkaban hell-hole- now to find the baby and exact revenge. I hope that all involved in what happened to Harry and Draco pay dearly. Looking forward to the next update. As for the baby, I actually imagined it to be a boy with the name Scorpius. Perseus is also good too.
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August 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I had so much reading this story! I hope you update soon :)
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August 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so much!
Could you please have Harry and Draco's new born baby a boy?
Cant wait for more!
Could you please have Harry and Draco's new born baby a boy?
Cant wait for more!
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August 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely LOVE this story! It's extremely well written, and I can easily see the characters as you've portrayed them!
As far as name suggestions go - Azalea for a girl, Aidan for a boy ^^
As far as name suggestions go - Azalea for a girl, Aidan for a boy ^^
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August 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Boy.
Perseus Severus Potter-Malfoy
Perseus Severus Potter-Malfoy
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August 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
A bouncing baby boy, please! Hopefully all the people who caused Harry's memory loss pay for what they've done! Dig up Dumbledore and beat him down if you have to. Lol...
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August 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Poor Draco :( I still vote for a boy and the name be Scorpius! I hope Harry gets revenge on everyone :) update soon!
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August 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Very well done, if a bit sketchy on the chapters (sorry, I like long chapters)
By the way, I vote for a boy, too, and how about Wulfric for his name?
It would be JUST like these people to name Harry and Draco's son after Dumbledore,
wouldn't it? :D
By the way, I vote for a boy, too, and how about Wulfric for his name?
It would be JUST like these people to name Harry and Draco's son after Dumbledore,
wouldn't it? :D
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August 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
GIRL