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by Riahana

person Maria
schedule July 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh, don't get me wrong, I do really like the story, especially now that it picked up it's pace a bit more and I do appreciate the fact that you're writing a story with a plot! That is rare to see in fanfiction, most just write short pointless stuff or pwp, but this has a story behind it. Yes, I personally wouldn't have minded it being shorter in several aspects, but I do see your reasoning for most of them. Oh, and it's Expecto Patronum, not Petronum. I really don't want to sound like I'm flaming you, because I do really like the story. A lot. :) Hope to see more soon!
person djaddict
schedule July 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I have always enjoyed "Lucius to the rescue!" lol and this was no exception, except I wish they would have tortured the Dusleys then and there.

Really looking forward for the 'splanin to happen and Harry's reaction.
person thrnbrooke
schedule July 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Severus should have grabbed harry and ran. But I can understand. His mate is there dead. He can never get her forgiveness.
person jami_lee
schedule July 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love this story!!! I can't wait to read more.
person Maria
schedule July 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
You really weren't kidding when you said the whole story... I love it, even though I do think it's a bit slow. I'm hoping next chappie will really start the story then? Don't get me wrong, it's nicely written, it's just a bit too long a intro.
person thrnbrooke
schedule July 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Be careful Tom and Dumbledore. Harry is a wild card.
person thrnbrooke
schedule July 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Lily is Severus' mate? Oh that's soooo sad!!! Poor Severus. And after what he just did... it's going to leave lasting scars.
schedule July 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow, great start. I loved your classification of elves. Thank you for a brilliant chapter.
person djaddict
schedule July 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is a very interesting start. I can't wait to see where you take it.

One nitpicky thing. I believe the term you want to be using instead of in-term is interim.
schedule July 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow, interesting story, I look forward to updates. Keep up the good work and thank for sharing.