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February 10, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Duh da duuuuuunnnnnn. Loved that ending. lol Thank you, HG4eva
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January 15, 2014 at 12:00 AM
The normally stoic Severus Snape panicking... Loved it! Thank you, HG4eva
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January 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
That poor man has such FIM syndrome... Foot in Mouth. lol I hope she learns quickly to navigate the raging waters that are his emotions. And, I want Draco and his cronies punished!!! Thank you, HG4eva
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January 2, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Hullo my dear,
A quick critique and praise session. I love the style in which you've written this. The point of view changes, but you don't feel the need to label it, ( thank you for that). I have a minor pet peeve with a dual point of view being labeled, I prefer to think I'm smart enough to figure it out. I enjoy the fact that you keep your readers guessing, never quite sure which twist will appear next. You've kept your characters "in character" to a point, but you've allowed enough leeway that they can explore new facets of their personalities as they develop in your writing. I love that you're putting detail in, not enough to bore, but in this area I think you could safely expand a bit more without causing boredom. A few more descriptions. You've had some lovely ones so far, just maybe add a bit as you go. That's my two cents for all the value it has! Well done my dear. That is all I can say. I have enjoy your plot much more than many others I've read, and a couple I've written. (Shame on me!)
Best of luck,
Kazzi
the witch with fangs
P.N. Post again soon
A quick critique and praise session. I love the style in which you've written this. The point of view changes, but you don't feel the need to label it, ( thank you for that). I have a minor pet peeve with a dual point of view being labeled, I prefer to think I'm smart enough to figure it out. I enjoy the fact that you keep your readers guessing, never quite sure which twist will appear next. You've kept your characters "in character" to a point, but you've allowed enough leeway that they can explore new facets of their personalities as they develop in your writing. I love that you're putting detail in, not enough to bore, but in this area I think you could safely expand a bit more without causing boredom. A few more descriptions. You've had some lovely ones so far, just maybe add a bit as you go. That's my two cents for all the value it has! Well done my dear. That is all I can say. I have enjoy your plot much more than many others I've read, and a couple I've written. (Shame on me!)
Best of luck,
Kazzi
the witch with fangs
P.N. Post again soon
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December 31, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Just wanted to encourage you to keep writing this. I've only just found it but I can see you first posted in 2012. I'm hoping your muse co-operates for 2014 because I can't wait to read more! Gail x
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April 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Love this!!!! How sad...
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July 13, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm another FF.net refuge!! Loving this story so far. I can't wait to see where it goes.
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July 13, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far!! I love your attention to grammar! Please post more chapters! I'm dying to read some action.
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July 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm... I am interested to see how Severus takes that letter! Please update soon!
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July 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! I loved it! I bet Hermione instigates the next confrontation, seeing how Severus has suddenly grown a conscience. :)