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July 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
That fight scene was intense! Seriously one of the best I've ever read for play by play action. I don't think I took a breathe through the whole thing! And I'm guessing/hoping there is some significance to the unicorn stabbing the boys with his horn? I can't wait to find out about that!
I had to keep reminding myself that Laine obviously finds Hale eventually while Severus relived those memories. How he will come out sane after having to go through that, I can't even imagine. The boys barely made it; as a parent, I can imagine its so much worse to have to witness those things happening to your own child. I hope he heeds Armand's advice and holds his judgement until the end. Laine will not allow Hale to be taken from him.
I forgot to mention before, I like what seems to be growing between Severus and Armand. I thought they'd be a good match from the beginning. Unless that kiss was just to snap Severus out of it...although Armand seemed to enjoy it.
Poor Remus! I hope Tonks finds him. I'm curious what Hale was trying to do, and what the results may just be...it seems like he was trying to heal the lycantropy, but because Remus was in wolf form, he was making him more wolf instead of human. Very interesting twist there; just how powerful is Hale's healing ability without a wand to limit it?
I know there was something else I wanted to commment on from a previous chapter that I had forgotten about, but I seem to have forgotten again! Maybe I'll remember for the next update....
I had to keep reminding myself that Laine obviously finds Hale eventually while Severus relived those memories. How he will come out sane after having to go through that, I can't even imagine. The boys barely made it; as a parent, I can imagine its so much worse to have to witness those things happening to your own child. I hope he heeds Armand's advice and holds his judgement until the end. Laine will not allow Hale to be taken from him.
I forgot to mention before, I like what seems to be growing between Severus and Armand. I thought they'd be a good match from the beginning. Unless that kiss was just to snap Severus out of it...although Armand seemed to enjoy it.
Poor Remus! I hope Tonks finds him. I'm curious what Hale was trying to do, and what the results may just be...it seems like he was trying to heal the lycantropy, but because Remus was in wolf form, he was making him more wolf instead of human. Very interesting twist there; just how powerful is Hale's healing ability without a wand to limit it?
I know there was something else I wanted to commment on from a previous chapter that I had forgotten about, but I seem to have forgotten again! Maybe I'll remember for the next update....
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July 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Grrrr! Severus really just doesn't seem to get the fact that his opinion of the matter is completely irrelevant. Laine clearly hasn't gotten his point across sufficiently, maybe Hale needs to step in and throw a fit about Severus' lack of understanding/trying to separate them! Thank goodness Armand has some sense!
I hope Remus isn't too hurt, I really love him!
Did the unicorn heal the werewolf bite then? So Laine isn't infected? That seemed to be what it did for Harry, so ...
Who rescued Laine from the water by the way? And please tell me we get to know their thoughts on dragging a naked half-dead kid out of the ocean! That should be interesting!
Thanks for the quick update and I hope to see a new chapter soon again!
I hope Remus isn't too hurt, I really love him!
Did the unicorn heal the werewolf bite then? So Laine isn't infected? That seemed to be what it did for Harry, so ...
Who rescued Laine from the water by the way? And please tell me we get to know their thoughts on dragging a naked half-dead kid out of the ocean! That should be interesting!
Thanks for the quick update and I hope to see a new chapter soon again!
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July 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Intense chapter! The fight with Remus in werewolf form was amazing. I haven't read a good fight scene in so long. Thank you for updating the story!
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July 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I adore your story so much!
First, as to your question about werewolf-Laine,at first I was thinking I could go either way on it, but the more I think about it, the less I like the idea.(sorry!) I just think that it is a lot to add on to what is already going on. There are a lot of issues being dealt with and this might be one too many, Severus finding out that Harry isn't his (heck, popping up in their life!), Linc and Albus, the war, Laine's mistrust of Remus, their bond and how people keep trying to interfere (I am glaring at you here, Snape!), learning magic, etc. Additionally, that would destroy any chance of Laine ever coming to trust Remus, and Remus and Snape's relationship/truce. Then there is the fact that being a werewolf would leave periods of time where Laine is not able to look out for Harry, besides the full moon, Remus is always tired/ill for a couple of days before and a couple after, and a weakened Laine is an unprotected Harry.
I just realized I continually refer to him as Harry and not Hale when I am writing, sorry about that. I actually love the name change, and normally I don't like that sort of thing, but honestly would he have even known that his name was Harry? He was never called that after he was left with the Dursley's, so logically he wouldn't know that name. Though in that case that is a heck of a coincidence that Hale was the name he got. Out of curiosity do we get to know how he got that name?
Do we ever get to know what Armand is? or why he is so ... odd? Don't get me wrong, I like him, but at several points Laine's thoughts about him were that something was strange about him.
With regards to Linc, did Laine not find it suspicious that right after he threatened the old man, he disappeared? I find that kinda fishy. Also with regards to his brother, Albus, is this a bad-Dumbledore story, or are you neutral about him? At the beginning it kinda seemed like he was very upset that Harry had disappeared, and not just because he was needed to fulfill the prophecy but also because he actually somewhat cared.
I had a thought too about the prophecy, it only states that Harry is the one with the power to defeat the dark lord. Considering Laine has used Harry's magic several times already, is it reasonable to assume that Laine could use Harry's power to defeat the Dark Lord? The prophecy only states that he has the power, not that he has to be the one wielding it.
I absolutely love Laine and his personality. He is confident and guarded because he has had to be. I don't think he is cocky, at least not in a bad way.
Sorry this review has been so long! I just wanted to tell you that you have an awesome story and I really hope you continue writing it (as quickly as possible pretty please?)
First, as to your question about werewolf-Laine,at first I was thinking I could go either way on it, but the more I think about it, the less I like the idea.(sorry!) I just think that it is a lot to add on to what is already going on. There are a lot of issues being dealt with and this might be one too many, Severus finding out that Harry isn't his (heck, popping up in their life!), Linc and Albus, the war, Laine's mistrust of Remus, their bond and how people keep trying to interfere (I am glaring at you here, Snape!), learning magic, etc. Additionally, that would destroy any chance of Laine ever coming to trust Remus, and Remus and Snape's relationship/truce. Then there is the fact that being a werewolf would leave periods of time where Laine is not able to look out for Harry, besides the full moon, Remus is always tired/ill for a couple of days before and a couple after, and a weakened Laine is an unprotected Harry.
I just realized I continually refer to him as Harry and not Hale when I am writing, sorry about that. I actually love the name change, and normally I don't like that sort of thing, but honestly would he have even known that his name was Harry? He was never called that after he was left with the Dursley's, so logically he wouldn't know that name. Though in that case that is a heck of a coincidence that Hale was the name he got. Out of curiosity do we get to know how he got that name?
Do we ever get to know what Armand is? or why he is so ... odd? Don't get me wrong, I like him, but at several points Laine's thoughts about him were that something was strange about him.
With regards to Linc, did Laine not find it suspicious that right after he threatened the old man, he disappeared? I find that kinda fishy. Also with regards to his brother, Albus, is this a bad-Dumbledore story, or are you neutral about him? At the beginning it kinda seemed like he was very upset that Harry had disappeared, and not just because he was needed to fulfill the prophecy but also because he actually somewhat cared.
I had a thought too about the prophecy, it only states that Harry is the one with the power to defeat the dark lord. Considering Laine has used Harry's magic several times already, is it reasonable to assume that Laine could use Harry's power to defeat the Dark Lord? The prophecy only states that he has the power, not that he has to be the one wielding it.
I absolutely love Laine and his personality. He is confident and guarded because he has had to be. I don't think he is cocky, at least not in a bad way.
Sorry this review has been so long! I just wanted to tell you that you have an awesome story and I really hope you continue writing it (as quickly as possible pretty please?)
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July 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm voting against werewolf Laine *unless* his becoming a werewolf would cause him to realize that his ego could use a check. Although I don't care for Harry's name change, I'm enjoying the story and excited to see where it goes next. Thanks for sharing!
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July 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Nononononononononononononononononononono. And now I will try to give a reason. I truly don't think making Laine a werewolf will do the story or Laine any good. It will just be another way he has been screwed over. Laine already acts so much like a werewolf when he is fighting - he is fearless, vicious, ruthless, and extremely strong. And I don't know if becoming a werewolf would work for Laine. I feel like if he were to be bitten his personality would over power the beast and in a fight I feel like Laine would win between him and Remus. I feel like it is more of a likely-hood that Tonks will become the werewolf in her effort to stop Laine from injuring/killing Remus.
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July 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Loving your revisions to this story. I say. I to werewolf Laine, I think he has a lot of other stuff on his plate
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July 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
No to Werewolf Laine! Loving this story btw :)
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July 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Your story is a whirlwind to read! It's so fast paced, but detailed; extravagant yet raw. Amazing and thrilling to the extreme, and I can't wait for more. Until your next chapter!
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July 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
great chapter! I'd say yes to werewolf Laine! It will only add strength to his already powerful body. He needs all he can have if he's going to protect Harry. Well update soon!