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Overall good story. Nice twist in that it's Hermione comforting Draco and healing him. Complete. Some really disturbing parts (rape, incest), but as memories, which somehow makes it easier to read.

Rose Zosma Malfoy. RoseZos maMalfoy. That is the absolute worst name I've ever heard.

Just Let Me Die: Review for Chapter 11 “So Mr. Nott, I here you’re a strong Legilimens.” – This is a common case of homophone misuse. Instead of "here," you should use "hear." “I still don’t trust you, old man.” – I love this line. :)

Just Let Me Die: Review for Chapter 12 Hermione wasn’t going to allow him to wallow in a river of self deprecation. – "Self-deprecation" has a rather positive connotation, so maybe a word like "self-hatred" would fit better here. His eyes opened and a maelstrom of emotion shown within their depths – "Maelstrom" is such an excellent descriptive word! Bonus points because you spelled it correctly. Great use of imagery.

Just Let Me Die: General Review JLMD was wonderfully written had had me eagerly clicking the "next" button. I especially liked that you didn't add an epilogue where Eltanin, Rose, and theoretical Scorpius were at King's Cross Station, getting ready to send Elty to Hogwarts. Such an epilogue would have been far too cliché. I hope you keep up the good writing, because I can't wait to read any of your other fics!

Just Let Me Die: Review for Chapter 7 gingerbread colored eyes – I've seen Hermione's eyes and hair described as chocolate, cinnamon, and many others, but never gingerbread! Well done on finding a new, interesting, and accurate adjective to describe Hermione's colouring. Hermione and Harry – The juxtaposition here is very thought-out. Most fanfic writers I've read probably would've written "Harry and Hermione," because that's how it would have been written in the actual Harry Potter books. You, however, realised that Hermione is more important in this story, and thus put her first.

Just Let Me Die: Review for Chapter 9 She found her Gryffindor Courage – I like how you capitalised "Courage." His eyes widened as he realized she’d went to bed without wearing any knickers. – In this scenario, "went" should be replaced with "gone."

Aw man. That's it??? Aw man!

Wow, Loved this story so much, I read it all in 2 days! Great writing!