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I am really enjoying this story despite the errors in grammar, Though I think you've done really well considering that English is not your first language. I know some poeple who have spoken and written english all their lives who don't do it as well as you have. I think the developement of the characters are coming a long nicely and the set up of the relationship is done well. The information on BDSM is very real and not blown way out of proportion like some fan-fictions can be, and having Severus understand that Harry is not yet a full grown man but still a teanager is a good. I really liked that bit of history about Severus's life and start into a BDSM realationship with his muggle mentor... I thought it gave a much more solid base for Severus's education than just him learning a twisted version of BDSM at Voldemort's feet. If you would like I would be more than willing to help you with your grammar a bit. I'm no expert certainly but I woiuld like to help if you want me to.

I love your story! I hope Snape will be able to help Harry and show him how it is to be taken care of.
Thank you for your story

I like this story. Your english isn't so bad but you may want to get a beta reader to clean it upa little.

do you have a bata or were you in a hurry? This chappie didn't flow as smoothly as the others seemed too. Very stilted and awkwardly phrased in places but at least the general idea could be gotten. I know you said English wasn't your first language so kudos for attempting this.

Now to the Chappie. It's a good thing Sev has learned patience as he's going to need it to help har. Kid has a lot of emotional damage to unravel. I think such a relationship would do good things for Har. having even one person who cares and is wiling to guide you can make a great difference. They'll be good for each other.

ah, two chapters to read, absolutely great
I still love the story and it is really interesting reading it again, especially with the knowledge where you lead this one
Slytherin still, despite anything :D

stupid question indeed, of course Harry should have known by then, really, it only shows how inexperienced and how shy, how virgin-like Harry really is, what of course gives Snape all options, he can train with Harry and he can do with Harry however he wishes, absolutely great
Slytherin

I think they got along because they already have feelings for each other, Severus clearly has already looked Harry up and down and Harry too seems to start with something, whatever it is, I don't even know what it is in later chapters, but well, maybe I'll find it out this time while reading
Gryffindor of course

"giving in to the heart", does this mean it's the chapter I think it is? *hope* *hope* *hope*
Gryffindor

This is really good. I've read some with a similar theme, but in them snape is an opportunistic dick who takes Har and twists him to his own desires. In this one I believe he genuinely wants to help and guide har. So, well done with that.
I did spot one typo. Boosted, meaning to lift where you meant Boasted or being boastful.

oh noooo!!! Snape was sleeping with Lily? Please don't let Snape be Harry's dad... please please please!!!!

and there was also a point in the story that was an 'a-ha' moment! well... maybe. When Harry showed a flicker of amusement and then his face went back to being confused that was the second time Snape had caught an amused look on Harry's face. And Harry is acting so hesitant, polite, confused... like a total uke. But he wants to know allllllll about this. But that amusement... is Harry acting!??!! If he's not... then let the training begin lol! And if he is acting... then he's setting up Snape to train him lol!!!! Either way I love it :)