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gah,quit updateing so fast... i can't keep up in my reviews. :P
anyway... i was going to make a comment on the typos but then i read you're doing this on word pad. Good grief. I don't think I'd have patience, no joke. Is there no where you could download word from?
so far I'm enjoying this a great deal. Har and Luc are rather cute together.
I'll review as i can. ^^

Hi.
Just wanted to drop by and say that I really like your story.
You have a good story-line and a really nice update-rate... ^^
Only one little thing is bugging me: The thing about owls (all raptors actually) is that the female is always a little bigger than the male (hence the reason it is rather expense to figure out whether you got a male or female, if you only have the one bird or don't want to wait until it lays eggs before you name it), that's why the male is called a tercel in ornithology.
Keep up the good work,
M

So an interesting story so far, though a few problems. You use 'single' quotations for dialouge rather than "double" which is incorrect and gives the impression that the character is thinking rather than speaking. Also this sentence:
'No,' Lucius said in a hoarse voice. 'No, please, you don't deserve me.'
I think you mixed it up. You most likely meant "No, please, I don't deserve you." as what you put implies that Lucius thinks he's too good for Harry instead of the other way around.
'He managed to pull Lucius into his arms, the man far to thin and weak' is incorrect. The 'to' should be 'too'.
I also find Harry's explination of the events that lead him there, too indepth and a bit...corny. It seems like he should keep it more simple and to the point rather than giving unneeded details.
Other than that, pretty good so far.

So far, so good. I've bookmarked this story so I can keep up with it!

I really love this so far!

More pretty please?

I love Veela stories for some reason, and yours is another really good one...looking forward to seeing where you take this story.

this is awesome. I meant to comment before you put out another chappie but i had to go out before i got more than a quick read of chappie one. I know the Vela schtick has been done before but i always look forward to seeing the new twists people add to make it their own. So far this is serious quality.
heh, go har. It's nice to see his Slyth side making an appearance there. Using Luc's own instincts to get his way. Nicely played har, very nice indeed.

Wow I like this so far. I don't often see a Harry/Lucius pairings that's not completely heart breaking so I'm looking forward to more of this. Good to see that Sirius, Remus and Dumbledore are still alive too, my heart always weeps when they're dead. Lol, can't wait for more

Green

This is a very interesting start. I can't wait to see where you take this story. Good work. Please update soon.

Jessie

hmmm very interestingf more please