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May 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I love it, really looking forward to more!!!
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February 16, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I am definitely enjoying this story. I love the AU that you have put together. I cannot wait to read the next chapter. Keep up the great work and take care.
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July 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
please prettyplease very pretty please update for i absolutely love your story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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June 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
ack, double post... and you weren't wrong about the typos. still, the weasley back stories were most fascinating. That was pretty dumb of Arty though. he's thrown away his sons and left himself with only a slut of a daughter to carry on the name... provided they can find anyone who wants her.
Lily i just shake my head over. seriously, what a door mat. the wizarding equivalent of barefoot n preggers.
oh, I'd just love to see sev as a mummy. that'd be sooooooooooooooooo cute.
seriously though, you've made them all eminently hate-able. ^^
the soda shop was a most interesting idea. nice one.
Lily i just shake my head over. seriously, what a door mat. the wizarding equivalent of barefoot n preggers.
oh, I'd just love to see sev as a mummy. that'd be sooooooooooooooooo cute.
seriously though, you've made them all eminently hate-able. ^^
the soda shop was a most interesting idea. nice one.
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May 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
You're very welcome. ;]
you tell him Har. mwhahahaha. make him work for it!
I look forward to various weasly appearances... though i hope they aren't as twat bag ish as their shrew of a sister. seriously, why'd they go all freaked out over an elemental when their kids are already rather a mixed bag, critter blood wise. i look forward to hearing that back story.
heh, 'slime build'. I know what you meant but it still brought up interesting mental images of said handsome scott, with a bucket on his head and green slime dripping down him. ^^
you tell him Har. mwhahahaha. make him work for it!
I look forward to various weasly appearances... though i hope they aren't as twat bag ish as their shrew of a sister. seriously, why'd they go all freaked out over an elemental when their kids are already rather a mixed bag, critter blood wise. i look forward to hearing that back story.
heh, 'slime build'. I know what you meant but it still brought up interesting mental images of said handsome scott, with a bucket on his head and green slime dripping down him. ^^
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May 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wow so i love dante he is so agressive that is just sexy.....wonder how the parents will take it when they here who harry's mate is...can't wait for more.
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May 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ok, well, firstly, I have not read it all; I got about halfway through chapter two. In the beginning, you said they were all born at the same exact time and date, which they weren't. You might want to go back and correct that, LOL.
The tense is a tiny bit confused in some places, I noticed a "was" where a "were" should have been, but I forget where it was, exactly.
The biggest thing I can see is that either you don't have a beta, or the beta is not very good at proofing for grammar. I WOULD volunteer my services, but I'm a bit swamped with RL issues at the moment, so I can't, I'm sorry. But I believe there is a place in the forums for betas and writers to connect, so you could look there.
The writing itself is good, and the premise is interesting, although it doesn't catch my interest right now (it may later, once I've finished reading the Sacrifices arc).
All in all, it needs a tiny bit of work, but it shows very definite promise if you fix the few mix-ups and get a dedicated beta. I will be willing to check back up on it if you keep reminding me to, and I may grow to like it, if you can keep it original enough (shouldn't be too hard, the way it is now).
I like what I have read so far, and I will read the rest when time permits and I don't have a migraine starting from lack of caffeine, but now I need to hunt down a soda or something.
The tense is a tiny bit confused in some places, I noticed a "was" where a "were" should have been, but I forget where it was, exactly.
The biggest thing I can see is that either you don't have a beta, or the beta is not very good at proofing for grammar. I WOULD volunteer my services, but I'm a bit swamped with RL issues at the moment, so I can't, I'm sorry. But I believe there is a place in the forums for betas and writers to connect, so you could look there.
The writing itself is good, and the premise is interesting, although it doesn't catch my interest right now (it may later, once I've finished reading the Sacrifices arc).
All in all, it needs a tiny bit of work, but it shows very definite promise if you fix the few mix-ups and get a dedicated beta. I will be willing to check back up on it if you keep reminding me to, and I may grow to like it, if you can keep it original enough (shouldn't be too hard, the way it is now).
I like what I have read so far, and I will read the rest when time permits and I don't have a migraine starting from lack of caffeine, but now I need to hunt down a soda or something.
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May 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This story it's just awesome, I love it. How you'~ve made their characters kept them mostly true, abs they don't feel flat. And personally I adore healer Harry. I also love the description of your new character! I can't wait to see your next update! Oh and for the poll Charlie = naga, Bill = elf, and Fred + George = pixe
~Pen
~Pen
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May 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
the creatures on offer for bill are a bit odd, depending on if he kept his canon personality. I would have thought he'd have the lycan option. none of the three really fit, but I;d go with naga (human serpent) as best of a bad bunch.
lycan or elemental elf for charlie... veela are to flighty and prissy for him despite their possessiveness. Though both of those suit bill better and the naga would suit charlie better... that is if he too kept his canon personality and dragon obsession.
defiantly pixy for the twins, they need something mischievous but not necessarily vicious if they kept their personality too.
anywho, these are just my opinion, since i don't know what you have planned or how like canon they are.
lycan or elemental elf for charlie... veela are to flighty and prissy for him despite their possessiveness. Though both of those suit bill better and the naga would suit charlie better... that is if he too kept his canon personality and dragon obsession.
defiantly pixy for the twins, they need something mischievous but not necessarily vicious if they kept their personality too.
anywho, these are just my opinion, since i don't know what you have planned or how like canon they are.
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May 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Bill Weasley: C)Humanoid-Serpent
Charlie Weasley: C)Elemental Royal Elf
Fred and George Weasley: A)Pixie...because it would explain alot about there personalities
oh an love the story by the way just started reading it today.
Charlie Weasley: C)Elemental Royal Elf
Fred and George Weasley: A)Pixie...because it would explain alot about there personalities
oh an love the story by the way just started reading it today.