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January 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Write more it's really good
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January 1, 2014 at 12:00 AM
please please please update this story I want to read more but it has not been updated in a long time :( so please update again soon
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November 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Review after reading the first three chapters.
To be honest, I wasn't sure about starting to read this story - I've been rather turned off slut!Harry fics after seeing too many bad ones. But your story's turning out better than expected. I think it's because you've clearly put some thought into Arthur's character, and you take the time to describe his emotions and actions outside the sex scenes. This makes him seem more real. I'm getting a good impression of affection and closeness between Arthur and Harry: their hugs, their talks and laughter.
In the third chapter, I'm glad you wrote Harry sitting on Arthur's lap and telling him all his problems, and being comforted. For me, that talk made the following 69 scene better: adding trust and a kind of sweetness to it.
Just one piece of advice: fix your spelling of George's name in Chapter 1. It's George, not Gorge.
Haven't decided yet if I'll read further, but if I do, I'll write another review later.
To be honest, I wasn't sure about starting to read this story - I've been rather turned off slut!Harry fics after seeing too many bad ones. But your story's turning out better than expected. I think it's because you've clearly put some thought into Arthur's character, and you take the time to describe his emotions and actions outside the sex scenes. This makes him seem more real. I'm getting a good impression of affection and closeness between Arthur and Harry: their hugs, their talks and laughter.
In the third chapter, I'm glad you wrote Harry sitting on Arthur's lap and telling him all his problems, and being comforted. For me, that talk made the following 69 scene better: adding trust and a kind of sweetness to it.
Just one piece of advice: fix your spelling of George's name in Chapter 1. It's George, not Gorge.
Haven't decided yet if I'll read further, but if I do, I'll write another review later.
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November 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I've read the whole thing now, and here a few more comments in case you ever come back to this story.
I liked the fourth and fifth chapters, but honestly felt that your story's consistency fell apart in the sixth and seventh. Mostly because of Harry's sudden severe illness, and its cause: sorry, but I just couldn't bring myself to believe that Dumbledore, Arthur, and Ron would all stand by and do nothing as Harry drank a mystery potion handed to him by Fudge. This was in stark contrast with the previous scene of Arthur getting angry and protective in response to Umbridge's treatment of Harry. - And if this whole convoluted twist was for the purpose of making Harry an incubus... well, surely there must have been a more plausible way to do it.
On the other hand, the magic underwear in Chapter 4 was rather fun, and creative, and I was glad to see another affectionate Arthur/Harry scene. Then seeing Harry with the twins in Chapter 5 was delightful - all three of them so hot and so happy. If you continue this story, I hope there'll be more scenes like those, and more exploration of the characters' emotional connections.
I liked the fourth and fifth chapters, but honestly felt that your story's consistency fell apart in the sixth and seventh. Mostly because of Harry's sudden severe illness, and its cause: sorry, but I just couldn't bring myself to believe that Dumbledore, Arthur, and Ron would all stand by and do nothing as Harry drank a mystery potion handed to him by Fudge. This was in stark contrast with the previous scene of Arthur getting angry and protective in response to Umbridge's treatment of Harry. - And if this whole convoluted twist was for the purpose of making Harry an incubus... well, surely there must have been a more plausible way to do it.
On the other hand, the magic underwear in Chapter 4 was rather fun, and creative, and I was glad to see another affectionate Arthur/Harry scene. Then seeing Harry with the twins in Chapter 5 was delightful - all three of them so hot and so happy. If you continue this story, I hope there'll be more scenes like those, and more exploration of the characters' emotional connections.
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July 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please please please wright more
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September 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm enjoying you're story a lot.
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September 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Greqt job hon! I look forward to more!
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September 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love your story!! I can't wait to see what ...situations... Harry gets into!! Can't wait for the next update!
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September 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh this is so brillint and I am really glade you have update because I really love this story but how come the two older children of the weaslesy don't seem to be in this story? what happened to charlie and Bill?
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May 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wow this is seriously brillint and i really love eveything that you have happening so fae. I hope that you decided to update agin real soon because I seriously can't wait to see what you have happen next and to see just what is happening to Harry so again please update real soon.