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Oh what a lovely little prank. Really, Draco should've been expecting some kind of retaliation; after all he took advantage of Harry. He's not just going to get away with it. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Leania

Well look at that. I do. :) Oh the revenge that's going to go back and forth. Can't wait to learn more about the spell and everything else.

if malfoy ups the anti though, he's got to know har will strike back... if he doesn't as buggs bunny once said. he don't know me very well, do he. along with 'of course, you realise this mean war.'

This story amazes me! I can't wait to see an update. Do you send out update alerts?

Oh man, I really liked this. It's rare you see this much potential in a first-time poster. Even though obviously this is a popular idea for Drarry, I think you carried it through the piece really well. The pacing is what's really important with these things, I feel like, because the eroticism kind of hinges on the abnormality of the strength of Harry's lust - however, if you slam it all in at once, the reader becomes desensitized to it and the whole 'umph' is gone. I think you moved it along very well and for a one-shot (or at least, would-be one-shot) there was just enough lead-in at the beginning not to weigh the whole thing down but enough to give us enough background to be able to pick up on and imagine the emotions going on throughout the lovely smutty-smut.

So, yeah. I'm sorry for the bubble-pipe rant. Though there were a handful of typos and a smidge of syntactical mess which made some sections require a second read. Not that I think it brought down the piece on the whole, but pieces that are already good are often great when they get polished up.

What I'm trying to say in my 'harumph' kind of way is that I'd love to talk about beta'ing for you if you don't have one already. I couldn't get your email off of your profile (sometimes they hide it so you have to actually put it in your self-description), so I figured I'd try to leave a message here.

You can get me at LLL@u.northwestern.edu or I am one of the few people who still loves AIM, and my screen name is "Lochlynn Key"

And even if you don't want to get in touch- great work! And I hope to see a continuation of this piece. :)

I'm glad you decided to continue. Interested to see where you're going to take it. Your writing is really enjoyable. Kept me hooked the entire time. Keep up the good work!

wow...that was great
was it a love spell for both of them...is Draco secretly crazy about lovely Harry....please continue ;)

I hope you do continue the story!!! I want to know what Harry plans on doing to Draco next! What'll happen to them both, will they fall in love? Will Harry really accept Draco? Gah! Good story!!!!!!

good, do. this does indeed sound like the kind of thing a slyth could get away with while umbitch ruled. Is the spell still in effect? Will malfoy be able to trigger it again or was it a one time deal? Will malfoy care that umbitch has marked up his unwilling pet? He didn't notice how skinny har is? I thought if he hadn't put the weight back on his ribs would be showing and such.