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Aw Poor Harry. Hope things get better. Update again soon please.

Love it, please update chapter 12 soon ^_^

d'awwww. Sevie found a friend. :P Still, it's good he's got some adult, understanding support. Hopefully, har will get less clingy as he reallises sev's not going anywehre and becomes accustomed to his presence and sev will adjust to har's need to be physical... a bond doesn't a relationship make after all. it's a good start but it needs work on both sides to make it flourish and grow.
hard to do at the best of times, which this isn't and with the screwed up child hoods they both had, it's lucky they've got good friends to help and fall back on. :P :D

I hope Sev thinks before he acts. I realize he is confused, but still think before you act.

Just finished chapter 5. love that you kep sev all Snarky but feel that the sex was really a bit sudden. I realize there is a bond but besides the fact that Harry has had 1 and only 1 dream of Severerus in which they did nothing more then kiss, there is also the minor fact that apparently Sev and harrys FATHER were lovers. But apparently Harry is so eager he hasn't thought of that. Nether has Sev. Not even a smidgen of guilt over taking the 17 year old son of the man he loved( who looks almost exactly like him) to bed. Also teh sex just came outa nowhere ...not even any foreplay, blow jobs, lingering gazes, hot make out sessions, hand jobs...I understand Harrys eagerness...kind of...but Sev should have definatly had more qualms...

Oh darn, this story started so so well :( and then Harry said he loved Sev after they have had sex once. Okay so Harry is 16 and pretty naive so I'm going to let it slide but...Sev did...nothing?????? no freak out? No panic? No anger? Just a " sharp intake of breath" ? We talking about the same guy here who lived alone without any love or effection for 20 years in a dungeon. His 16 year old lover just declared his love for him and there is no bigger reation then a " sharp intake of breath" ??????????? Also...why is there never any foreplay? they don't even seem to enjoy undressing each other or touching each other bodys...its just *pulls shorts down and hand over lube* put it in then eh? --___--; You know there are fics out there where the authors spend 30 chapters just building up to the single awesome moment of sexual intercourse and in your story its seems kind of like 5 sentences of a non-event...I mean lube is not the only thing you need for preperation...the hole needs to be stretched so that it can accomodate especially when it hasn't been used for those activities in a while ( ie a few weeks). geh...your plot is not bad and your writing style is good but I can't go on reading when the sex scenes are so so bad :( I'm sorry...can't you please put in some more affection or foreplay?

Okay, so he is preggers. ummmmmmmm....how? You didn't really give an explanation besides " strong magical bond". Is Sev periodically a hermaphrodite?? Did he always have eggs and a womb instead of sperm or is it just on special occasions? Did the sperm in his arse magically create an ovum out of his anal tissue? and how will there " be a birth canal" ? Will it come out of his arse? Or will his penis magically morph into a vagina when the time is near?? Appearum Vaginum? O_O So many questions...

Good update. Hope more is to come soon

i love that its severus that's having the baby i so hate ron because of his jealousy issue's

so good