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February 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey again! I liked getting the other side of the story, too. Thanks for that. I am glad to know Draco has had a real turnaround. I look forward to seeing more of him trying to convince Hermione of it, too. :-) BTW - the spacing was much better this time. Congrats on that, too! Thanks, HG4eva
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February 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hello,
Your fic is good so far but there are some things that need some help. The lack of punctuation is a major issue, for me anyway. This site offers Betas and there are some lovely people who like to help out. The spelling and grammar aren't too bad, but the Beta will straighten that out when s/he sorts out the lack of punctuation. Secondly, when you copy and paste your story to this site, you need to put extra spaces in between paragraphs and dialogue lines or it all ceamps in together without breaks and is hard on the reader. I hope I don't offend you with my suggestions, I don't mean to be rude, I'm just a blunt person. Thanks for sharing it with us and good luck.
Jillian
Your fic is good so far but there are some things that need some help. The lack of punctuation is a major issue, for me anyway. This site offers Betas and there are some lovely people who like to help out. The spelling and grammar aren't too bad, but the Beta will straighten that out when s/he sorts out the lack of punctuation. Secondly, when you copy and paste your story to this site, you need to put extra spaces in between paragraphs and dialogue lines or it all ceamps in together without breaks and is hard on the reader. I hope I don't offend you with my suggestions, I don't mean to be rude, I'm just a blunt person. Thanks for sharing it with us and good luck.
Jillian
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February 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
oooh yay!!! More please!!
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January 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
What a nice beginning and setup. I look forward to more really soon! Thank you, HG4eva