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good story just started reading.

I really love your story. It's so steamy and got interesting plot. For the steamy part: please don't rush to completion. I noticed many good stories going downhill fast after that. Also, think abut your measurements - if Sev's cock is 3 inches thick then it would be reasonable that he wouldn't introduce that size or larger plugs especially before first penetration. After all, everyone likes a tight hole... And though magic and potions can probably easily fix it I believe that i is more likely to happen after at least few rolls in the hay, as a result of search for further thrills. Oh, and I'd love to see a slight dom/sub content if you're into it (spanking, nipple torture bondage etc) - of course introduced very gradually.
As for the plot: it certainly caught my attention though I think it may be hard for you to find serious obstacles for Sev in his plans due to that obedience potion. Maybe you should limit its spread somehow i.e make it so it has to be keyed into a particular person, or make the brewing time insanely long... Up to you; just few hopefully helpful suggestions for you. Also, try not to create massive monologue parts (like when Sev explains old ways). I know that you need to further the plot but you can sneak some info through books, overheard conversations, observation etc. It just gets very dry when it's served in spades like that.
I m looking forward to further development of your story. Please take the criticism the way it was meant - lightly :P

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Guess you still have writers block? Since its been nearly or more than a month since the last update?

I Like The Way You'r Story is Going it is Very Entertaining And I Like The Plot But You Haven't Written Anything About Harry's Owl And Since I Like Magical Animals I Would Like To See More Of Them

T.T When will you update?????? Need...Yaoi...PLEASE!

Hi,
I've been on the edges, reading this story for a while.
Admittedly, my weirded out state has wared with my curiosity, therefore I keep coming back.
I find this story fascinating and am enjoying the intricacy of it.
Hoping you are well and will be glad to help in any way I am able.
The blind apprentice

You have to continue the snarry goodness. You plot is awesom!!! I check like every day to see if a new chapter is up

I have just recently started reading your story and haven't been able to stop until I reached the end of the most recent chapter!! I can't wait til you update, but more importantly I love how controlling Snape is! I'm usually a Drarry fan but I'm considering that Snarry is more kinky then the former :) love the work! one thing I don't particularly enjoy is how "weak" Harry seems most of the time....I can understand the submissive part with Snape, but the rest of the time? He's a lion acting like a mouse! lol Please don't take this the wrong way I truly do enjoy this story, only trying to give you helpful feed back

AH! An update at long last! What an amazing chapter although I'm a bit saddened at the lack of Smut...this backround info is really interesting! However I do have to wonder why Voldie didn't sense anything in Sev???