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This story is fantastic! Please let me know when you update, my email is charlie-becks@manx.net i can't wait for more :)

Oohh love it!! Lol plzzzz don't make Hermione a traitor to harry. I really can't imagine her, a muggle born who has been discriminated since she entered hogwarts.

glad to see another chapter. so now all the boys are together in one place at least, that'll make that part easier, of course considering all of them are now mentally and physically traumatized, sev and remus are going to have a lot on their hands to deal with. and i'm curious to see how they're going to wind up getting revenge on everyone involved, because the bad guys can't get away without repercussions.

one small thing "Himself and Lupin had" it should be "He and Lupin had," generally the best way i've found to figure out what pronoun to use is to get rid of the other person and say the sentence (it would have been "He had..."). works really well in trying to figure out whether to use "I" or "me" as well.

keep up the good work, i look forward to seeing what happens next :)

very interesting start to things, quite a few spelling errors, especially in the last section, that make things a little difficult to read at times. also, you might want to explain what "freakishness" dudley's been accused of, did he receive his magic late or is he gay or what? and it's just cat o' nine tails or a whip (which generally i believe is just one long piece) not a cat o'nine tails whip. i look forward to seeing how you progress with this.

It's a little annoying trying to read this chapter because the story lines are longer than the screen, so one must continually scroll left to right. It would be greatly appreciated if this could be undated with wider margins.

Edward/Severus? That does sound interesting....do it!

I really like the first chapter!

as I am not really a Twilight-Fan I'd love to see a Remus/Severus pairing, Harry/Jacob sounds good too

That was dark and personally i would have been screaming my head off in my mind....i would take Voldemort over that sick freak...However I am a Slytherin and would have been a deatheater. I like it, please update soon.

Excellent, love the beginning SO much. Can't wait till you write more. I think you should bring Sirius back, but that's because I love him lol I'll have my fingers crossed that they reach Harry in time! Or will this be like his death where it kills of the crux? either way i cant wait! please update soon! :)

Thank you for undating the story again :) Vernon is such a creep, you did a great job of making me hate him, I can't wait for Remus and Snape to show up and kick some fat ass.
As for pairing I think Draco and Edward would be hot, and Dudley imprint with Leah, it's about time she gets a man.
Please update soon!!!