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for Finding The One...Or Two

by sparkalla

schedule January 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Loved what I have read so far an't wait for more.
Can you please email when an update occurs at movies_n_celebs@hotmail.com as there is no other way for me to know when there is a new chapter to read.
Kind Regards
Steph
person Jessica
schedule January 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
this is really cool, update soon
person Alkeni
schedule January 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I eagerly await more.
schedule January 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Great layout for the story! I too have been frustrated by the unfinished Veela-stories, and the unfinished Blaise/Hermione/Draco ones. Thank you for taking on the task of rectifying this! You've drawn me in with the perfectly logical explanations of Veela mating. I can't wait to see how you develop the storyline!
schedule January 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I really like that most of the Slytherins are happy and well adjusted after the war. I take my hat of to someone for FINALLY giving Crabbe and Goyle something to do. I can totally see them being a couple of mister fix-its.

Will Draco be a traditional Veela? They are usually pretty dominant and possessive of their mates. hint hint The possessiveness is the traits I like most about veela fics, well, at least the ones I've read.

hmm...is Blaise also a part Veela? That would be very interesting.

Thanks for updating
person A
schedule January 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Loving it so far! Can't wait to read more!
person smt79
schedule January 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
hmm interesting meeting with hermione and draco.. i wonder what was on his mind??
person smt79
schedule January 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wow i loved this background on veela and how they find their mates.. excellent and i cannot wait til the next chap!!!
person reriddle
schedule January 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ok here I go.

1) good start. At times you are a bit wordy. Like the paragraph about Hermione not so suddenly becoming a pretty woman. I LOVE stories about Draco/Blaise/Hermione as Veelas so I do hope that you continue to work on this story and further develop it. As you've only written 2 short chapters I'm interested to see how it will progress.

2) just an issue with your format. The second chapter spills over the side, making you scroll horizontally.
schedule January 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Poor Ron, lol.

I like this lighter Hermione. I think it's good that she's isn't so neurotic.


I agree with the other reviewer about the story being tad wordy at times, but not so much that it annoys me.