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YAY! nice first chappie. *snickers. oh, how they do like messing with Sevies head. mwhahaha. I can't wait til sev learns who Evan Harris is. That'll be utterly hilarious.
oh, i am looking forward to seeing what you keep and what falls by the way side. I do hope that mio still goes dark and I'd love it if Siri did end up in d e central if only for the lol value. What ever you do with it though, i'm sure to love it.

I hate to be the one to bring this up but Tom and Harry already know what the ring is. It was told in the same chapter when they found out that the cloke blocked the AK. You might want to go back and change that as again they already know what the ring is. I cant remember the chapter number but I do remember it being in one of the chapters when they were talking to Harry's family pictures. Other then that it was a great chapter and you are doing a good job from what I can see.

I am very thankful that you have taken this story over and will be continuing it.
In chapter 17, Tom and Harry discover that the Ring horcrux is the Resurrection Stone, and that the Invisibility Cloak is the Death Shroud.

Thank you! You do great job!
I'm happy that you decided to continue this wonderful story.

I'm really excited to have this story continued. I was so sad when Aya decided to stop writing her version. I really look forward to seeing where you take this, though I was slightly disappointed Harry wasn't sitting on the floor when alone with Tom :) Thanks for deciding to pick this up.

Not bad at all. I bet you like talking in your everyday life. Those overlong sentences are a strong indicator for it :-)
I do like your style. Despite those sentences. It get's anoying and rather had to to read.
Let's say cut the them in halfs. Especially those at the beginning of the chapter.
Please update soon.

Yaaaaay finally a new chapter I'm glad u decided to contintue this fic, can't waaaaait till Bella finds out about the dark lord's consort.

Following this story with intrest. In the beginning you used Tom name twice in the end of sentence and beginning of a new one. I am not one to judge small mistakes. Just thought that it sounded bit odd. Perhaps Dark Lord, Voldemort or something. I also wondered if Sirius will became a death eater or he could be tied to Harry instead. Or if he will adopt Harry by blood and magic. Since Harry appears as his legal heir since Sirius has no children and Harry has Black blood. It was also implied that Harry is a meta since he can change the lenght of his hair. Bloodtrait of the Blacks that would be strenghened with infusion of Black blood, maybe add new abilities. I doubt there would be big chances in his appareance since he is a teenager. Maybe correct his eyesight or tame his hair. Will Harry meet Bellatrix, would be interesting.

Just as I thought, marvolous job :)

I think it was a good start. Suggestion, Tom likes to call Harry 'Pet' and 'love' I always got the feeling in part to prevent himself from using Harry or Evan at the wrong moment, especially since the glamor ring was set to allow for Harry to be seen as Harry by anyone who knew Even is Harry... Did that make sense?