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I thought according to the original prophecy, Harry and the Dark Lord can only die if they cast the AK on each other. And it's been mentioned several times that Harry is basically immortal. I know we've learned his cloak protects from the AK but in this chapter it says Tom has to remember that Harry is mortal and he can still lose him. But with the prophecy isn't that not correct? I'm just confused is all. Did I miss something?

Excellent, I can't wait for more chapters soon (it's been over a month now)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I finally caught up with this fic after a long time and I can't wait for the next chapters.

That said I sort of have a minor request. You see I would really like to see a part of a chapter where we are actually see how Fawkes the Phoenix feels about everything that is occurring and maybe also have him leaving Hogwarts. After all with all of Dumbledore's manipulations I really can't see Fawkes being all that supportive of Dumbledore. Maybe you can have Fawkes basically having stuck around with Dumbledore as long as he did because he hoped that Dumbledore would eventually be persuaded from the choices he is making, or something along the line.

Kill Wormtail please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

In my opinion you have matched the vibe from the original Author really well!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Danyealle, I posted something back in July of last year on the review reply page (I'm sure it was the wrong place to post it) that never got a response. I decided today to re-post that comment here. I hope that this will get a reply this time.

"I was reading though your story, but got a little stumped at chapter 28. I know that Athey/Aya had been doing a first run-through of a day at Hogwarts, and a second run-through of the same day at Morhda Abbey. By the end of Chapter 27, we were at the end of the second run-through of November 1st. What day was Chapter 28 on, and why did he not use the time-turner when he got to Morhda like he usually does? If he were to arrive there and not use it, then he would not have been able to be there to leave 10 minutes before he arrived. Is he supposed to miss a day at Morhda? Or did his history change? Wasn't he supposed to go back in time then to relive that day as his second run-through after leaving school?"

Thank you,
Lizzy

Love it.
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This seems like a great continuation, but you use way too many comas. It's driving me crazy. I can't focus on the story. :( Would you consider going back and fixing this? You'll keep a better audience that way.

Another chapter where nothing is happened... I feel like you lost interest in the story. Can you put some action in it please? Every chapter includes a conversation and some guy's thoughts, that I don't care about. It's boring.
Something must happen, 'cause I'm going crazy...

Ok, first this may seem harsh, but it's so irritating that it stopped me in the middle of reading, forcing me to write this little note. Why, in the name of all that's Dark, you repeatedly finish your sentences with "anymore", it's such a strange quirk, it interrupts thought process, just jumping at me out of nowhere (or rather out of otherwise properly formulated portion of text). Stop it, please. Don't make it another case of nice and interesting fan fiction that's ruined because of spelling, grammar or other such writing issues. Now, ranting done, it was not my intention to offend. I really like this story.