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January 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
What you're doing with the story so far is really good. I wouldn't mind reading more. Hope you update soon. Can't wait to read more
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December 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I would like to thank you for continuing this story as I love it very much and am happy that it wasn't left unfinished:) In this chapter Tom said that there aren't much students in the school that can keep an eye for Harry but I would like to remind you that there are the people from DAA that know about Harry working with Voldemort. Also I reread this fic and there was something confusing for me. In ch40 when Wormtail thinks about getting rid of Sirius he thinks thinks that he can't take on Harry because he is too strong and there he thiks about duel between Harry and Tom and from that chapter he thinks of Evan as Harry but firstly he couldn't saw that duel as it was during adwanced group sesion and we all know that Wormy was not in that group, secondly he didn't know that Evan is Harry or did I miss the moment where they let him know about it? Either way that dosen't matter now that he was kissed. Also there is something really bothering me where the hell is Nagini??? I love that snake but from the moment that they moved into the Abbey she completely dissapeared:( Hmmm I wrote too much sorry about that and about my english. Also i would like to wish you a Happy New Year!!!
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December 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
The scenes felt so short, unlike previous chapters. Hope you update soon.
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December 16, 2014 at 12:00 AM
While I was reading this chapter there were a few things I kind of wanted to bring up
Why don't/didn't Harry and Voldemort try distracting Dumbledore with various other legal things that could have happened. For example trying to get Sirius a trial and then having a custody battle be set off thanks to Lucius and Sirius and others. If there was a custody battle before knowledge of Harry being emancipated then Albus could have been greatly distracted or Sirius or someone could have gotten Harry emancipated. Granted I don't know enough about politics in such a way that would help with this but I just feel many distractions could have done such a thing as hide this, especially if Albus just believed it was a rumour because he is convinced Harry would rather be with Sirius or the Weasley's
Also, will you have Harry get any training to be a true animagus? I know it would probably take many years to achieve but maybe it could just be something he does in his spare time at Hogwarts or at the mansion
Finally don't you think Voldemort's and Harry's plans are going a bit too smoothly? I mean maybe you should have them lose a political battle with Dumbledore or something along the lines
Why don't/didn't Harry and Voldemort try distracting Dumbledore with various other legal things that could have happened. For example trying to get Sirius a trial and then having a custody battle be set off thanks to Lucius and Sirius and others. If there was a custody battle before knowledge of Harry being emancipated then Albus could have been greatly distracted or Sirius or someone could have gotten Harry emancipated. Granted I don't know enough about politics in such a way that would help with this but I just feel many distractions could have done such a thing as hide this, especially if Albus just believed it was a rumour because he is convinced Harry would rather be with Sirius or the Weasley's
Also, will you have Harry get any training to be a true animagus? I know it would probably take many years to achieve but maybe it could just be something he does in his spare time at Hogwarts or at the mansion
Finally don't you think Voldemort's and Harry's plans are going a bit too smoothly? I mean maybe you should have them lose a political battle with Dumbledore or something along the lines
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December 15, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I don't know if you noticed, but you start out every paragraph with a verb. That's boring, your writing has very little variety for the reader. I honestly got bored of after trying to read it at chapter twenty-six. I'm a little sadden you didn't to merge the previous author's style of writing with yours so the transition wouldn't be so jarring and upsetting. Seriously, you can use other ways to describe what's happening or what the character is feeling or doing.
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December 14, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Wow, great job again!
I'm following your story erversince you adopted it and I really appreciate what you make out of it :)
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter ;D
Sakon
I'm following your story erversince you adopted it and I really appreciate what you make out of it :)
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter ;D
Sakon
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December 4, 2014 at 12:00 AM
They gonna marry!!! *Dancing through the room*
And Dumblehumble is plotting... But he want stand a chance against the dark forces! *Muhahaha*
Sirius is calling the Dark Lord "Tom". Somehow that kind of bugs me... He doesn't seem the person who can accept Tom that easy... AndI don't think Tom would like to be referred by his first given name by anyone else but Harry...
But if Harry is calling him that all the time when he speaks with Sirius... Sirius has maybe just taken it as habbit...
Anyway they gonna MARRY! SOON!
Is Draco going to the Yule ball? Will he know who Harry is?
Another point: thor and Draco do not know of Harry and the Dark Lord...
They gonna marry and two of Harrys friends do not know...
I am so waiting for the time when the secret is told. *grin*
And in the end I have a request. Could you bring more cute things in? Like a peck on the cheack or the petting of the hair when their were sitting next to each other reading. Just so little things. A brush of the cheak or a kiss to the front head. So little signs of affection. That would make me really happy... Only if it's fitting to your storyline!
So I hope you find time to post another chapter soon. Because you are doing awesome work so far and even after all this time I am waiting impatiently for the next chap and grinning like a Cheshire cat when I see there's a new one even before I read it.
You are awesome and I love the story. Just wanted to tell you.
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LaLiLu
And Dumblehumble is plotting... But he want stand a chance against the dark forces! *Muhahaha*
Sirius is calling the Dark Lord "Tom". Somehow that kind of bugs me... He doesn't seem the person who can accept Tom that easy... AndI don't think Tom would like to be referred by his first given name by anyone else but Harry...
But if Harry is calling him that all the time when he speaks with Sirius... Sirius has maybe just taken it as habbit...
Anyway they gonna MARRY! SOON!
Is Draco going to the Yule ball? Will he know who Harry is?
Another point: thor and Draco do not know of Harry and the Dark Lord...
They gonna marry and two of Harrys friends do not know...
I am so waiting for the time when the secret is told. *grin*
And in the end I have a request. Could you bring more cute things in? Like a peck on the cheack or the petting of the hair when their were sitting next to each other reading. Just so little things. A brush of the cheak or a kiss to the front head. So little signs of affection. That would make me really happy... Only if it's fitting to your storyline!
So I hope you find time to post another chapter soon. Because you are doing awesome work so far and even after all this time I am waiting impatiently for the next chap and grinning like a Cheshire cat when I see there's a new one even before I read it.
You are awesome and I love the story. Just wanted to tell you.
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LaLiLu
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November 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
It seems like you have a real passion for this story are doing justice to Athy's creation thus far. Can't wait to read what you have in store for us.
Just a note: at the end of the chapter, from Snape's point of view, you have him referring to Evan Harris as 'Evans' when it should probably be 'Harris'.
Just a note: at the end of the chapter, from Snape's point of view, you have him referring to Evan Harris as 'Evans' when it should probably be 'Harris'.
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November 28, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for yet another chapter!
Good planning and preparations. I wonder what Bill's doing at this point in time. And the other characters as well.
Dumbles will be so frustrated when he gets Siri's reply. :)
Good planning and preparations. I wonder what Bill's doing at this point in time. And the other characters as well.
Dumbles will be so frustrated when he gets Siri's reply. :)
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November 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 61
Good chapter. I'm eager to see what Albus will pull next. Short of kidnapping Harry I can't think what might work.
Chris 7100, I am thrilled that I'm not the only person to have noticed the similarities between this author and Speedy Tomato. Their writing styles are practically identical, enough so that my own assumption is that they are the same person - especially since they use the same beta and acknowledge assistance from the same people.
Good chapter. I'm eager to see what Albus will pull next. Short of kidnapping Harry I can't think what might work.
Chris 7100, I am thrilled that I'm not the only person to have noticed the similarities between this author and Speedy Tomato. Their writing styles are practically identical, enough so that my own assumption is that they are the same person - especially since they use the same beta and acknowledge assistance from the same people.