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February 15, 2015 at 12:00 AM
OMG. OMG. OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!!!!! AN UPDATE!!! Yay! Gah but it was just a filler. Whatever! It was an update! I hope to see more soon! With sex! And violence! And more details! And I don't even care what's in it, just keep updating! (Sorry, I'm on a large bit of a sugar high)
But seriously. I do like your writing style, but you could add a little more detail into your work. You focus mainly on the words spoken than you do the actions taking place. That isn't a bad thing, but I'm a very visual person and I have issues following what happens if there isn't a lot of vividly depicted actions in between the dialogue. You focus mainly on Harry and Voldemort, but this is such a complexly woven storyline, occasional input from other characters (other than a few sentences) is needed.
How is Hermione doing in her progression towards the Dark? Is she almost there? Completely? What do the other Slytherins think of Draco and Harry being so buddy-buddy out of Potions. What else is happening with Harry's various studies? What else is happening during the time in which Harry is at Voldemort's side, besides the talks about the obvious subjects of war and their marriage? What's going to happen during their marriage? Are you going to copy a pagan one, or a regular one, or make up your own? What are the preparations? Who will be there? Who will know? When will the Daily Prophet find out? What will happen then? What will Dumbledore do once he finds out? What's Barty been up to? And Umbridge? Does that thing with the blood quill happen? What'll Voldemort say about that? What's going through the numerous Weasley's minds? And Snape? How's he doing with all this? Surely he must still have some issues with Lily's son being with the Dark Lord, still. And Sirius? Lucius? Bella? The other Death Eaters? How are their weekly dueling sessions going? Are Bellatrix and the other from Azkaban back to their former glory? How's Narcissa doing with the many subjects she was set to research for Harry and Voldemort? Have they found anything new? Old and interesting? How will Harry get the Elder Wand? Is there going to be a giant final battle, or is everything going to be sorted already from the inside, out? How will the rest of the Widarding population react when they discover Harry's heavy immersion into the Dark Arts? How will Harry react? Voldemort? Everyone else?
Soooooo enough of my rambling. If you wanna reach me, you can find me on fanfiction under Chii-pet. Sorry if I accidentally flamed. I didn't mean to! i just wanted to help get you thinking on what you wanted to happen with everything and everyone. Like I said above, this is a really tightly interwoven storyline. I got tangled. Can't imagine what your notes look like lol. But yeah, I hope I helped. Ish...? Ok. It's like 3 now, so I'm just gonna go now... I again hope I didn't flame!
But seriously. I do like your writing style, but you could add a little more detail into your work. You focus mainly on the words spoken than you do the actions taking place. That isn't a bad thing, but I'm a very visual person and I have issues following what happens if there isn't a lot of vividly depicted actions in between the dialogue. You focus mainly on Harry and Voldemort, but this is such a complexly woven storyline, occasional input from other characters (other than a few sentences) is needed.
How is Hermione doing in her progression towards the Dark? Is she almost there? Completely? What do the other Slytherins think of Draco and Harry being so buddy-buddy out of Potions. What else is happening with Harry's various studies? What else is happening during the time in which Harry is at Voldemort's side, besides the talks about the obvious subjects of war and their marriage? What's going to happen during their marriage? Are you going to copy a pagan one, or a regular one, or make up your own? What are the preparations? Who will be there? Who will know? When will the Daily Prophet find out? What will happen then? What will Dumbledore do once he finds out? What's Barty been up to? And Umbridge? Does that thing with the blood quill happen? What'll Voldemort say about that? What's going through the numerous Weasley's minds? And Snape? How's he doing with all this? Surely he must still have some issues with Lily's son being with the Dark Lord, still. And Sirius? Lucius? Bella? The other Death Eaters? How are their weekly dueling sessions going? Are Bellatrix and the other from Azkaban back to their former glory? How's Narcissa doing with the many subjects she was set to research for Harry and Voldemort? Have they found anything new? Old and interesting? How will Harry get the Elder Wand? Is there going to be a giant final battle, or is everything going to be sorted already from the inside, out? How will the rest of the Widarding population react when they discover Harry's heavy immersion into the Dark Arts? How will Harry react? Voldemort? Everyone else?
Soooooo enough of my rambling. If you wanna reach me, you can find me on fanfiction under Chii-pet. Sorry if I accidentally flamed. I didn't mean to! i just wanted to help get you thinking on what you wanted to happen with everything and everyone. Like I said above, this is a really tightly interwoven storyline. I got tangled. Can't imagine what your notes look like lol. But yeah, I hope I helped. Ish...? Ok. It's like 3 now, so I'm just gonna go now... I again hope I didn't flame!
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February 14, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. I loved it and am glad that they finally got his 'family'.
Can't wait for more.
Can't wait for more.
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February 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Yay, a new chapter! This is by far my favorite HP fanfic and I'm really glad you're sticking with it :D
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February 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
yes that sounds good to force Dubbles to waste his powers .......Thanks for the update !!!!!
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February 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I love your story, and especially love the fact that you are still updating, thank you for taking it on :) so that a good story wasn`t left in the dust.
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February 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the chapter 62/63.
Gradual planning for the endgame and the emancipation move. Good to see things moving on the different fronts.
Gradual planning for the endgame and the emancipation move. Good to see things moving on the different fronts.
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February 9, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I'm crazy about their marriage !!!
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January 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Love the story really hope you'll continue with it and soon.
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January 23, 2015 at 12:00 AM
just re-read this again so to refresh my mind...OMG please if your around please update this it's so good !!!!!!
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January 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Love it, all the manoeuvrings and secrets, gripping story. Thank you