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November 13, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hello =)
I discover the sequel of the fic on ff net and i want to say it's totaly crazy the way you had managed to continued without break the rythm ! I really like it ! it's two day i'm on and i can't wait to have the next chapter =)
Glad to discover your work =)
See you soon on this wabsite !!! =))))
I discover the sequel of the fic on ff net and i want to say it's totaly crazy the way you had managed to continued without break the rythm ! I really like it ! it's two day i'm on and i can't wait to have the next chapter =)
Glad to discover your work =)
See you soon on this wabsite !!! =))))
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November 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for continuing this story!!
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November 3, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I posted this in May or so of this year, but a question I had asked in it was really dumb - as in I smacked myself in the head when I read it just now. So I removed the stupid query.
Ch. 59
So happy to see an update! If there is one criticism I have on this, it's that there's too much talking. Everything gets talked over and discussed and then discussed again. Bring on the action, I say! *g* Hope we'll see another update soon!
Ch. 59
So happy to see an update! If there is one criticism I have on this, it's that there's too much talking. Everything gets talked over and discussed and then discussed again. Bring on the action, I say! *g* Hope we'll see another update soon!
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October 2, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hey
The story line is very good and gripping. You have continued the original story in an admirable way.
Some observations:
1. The language and style of writing from chapter 25 to about chapter 45 was very good. It has changed completely from there on. Its almost as if someone else is writing it.
2. In the later chapters the language is very casual. Phrases like "I'll get with" and "That's for damned sure" are repeated too many times. The feel of the characters which has been developed through out the whole story is reduced due to the out of character language.
3. Words like fag/ciggi instead of cigarette and brekky instead of breakfast, hols instead of holidays is distracting.
Somehow the last few chapters are going into too many minute details and it feels like the plot is lagging behind due to this.
Please don't take this to mean that I did not enjoy this story. I think it was a good read. These were some points which I felt would help in improving your writing style.
The story line is very good and gripping. You have continued the original story in an admirable way.
Some observations:
1. The language and style of writing from chapter 25 to about chapter 45 was very good. It has changed completely from there on. Its almost as if someone else is writing it.
2. In the later chapters the language is very casual. Phrases like "I'll get with" and "That's for damned sure" are repeated too many times. The feel of the characters which has been developed through out the whole story is reduced due to the out of character language.
3. Words like fag/ciggi instead of cigarette and brekky instead of breakfast, hols instead of holidays is distracting.
Somehow the last few chapters are going into too many minute details and it feels like the plot is lagging behind due to this.
Please don't take this to mean that I did not enjoy this story. I think it was a good read. These were some points which I felt would help in improving your writing style.
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September 29, 2015 at 12:00 AM
hallo,
I am thankful, that you adopted this story.
There are just some things I noticed:
Tom alreadym knows the secret of Grimmauld Place. Sirius sent it to Harry, I think at his birthday, and Tom read it too.
You sometimes use the same word very often. e.g.: "plenty" in the last chapter. Perhaps you can change that? Would be great!
Thanks for all your work
And i'm looking forward to the next chapter
panth
I am thankful, that you adopted this story.
There are just some things I noticed:
Tom alreadym knows the secret of Grimmauld Place. Sirius sent it to Harry, I think at his birthday, and Tom read it too.
You sometimes use the same word very often. e.g.: "plenty" in the last chapter. Perhaps you can change that? Would be great!
Thanks for all your work
And i'm looking forward to the next chapter
panth
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September 28, 2015 at 12:00 AM
You're doing great on this! Lol I really hope Harry gets to kill ol' Dumby..
Can't wait to see an update.
Can't wait to see an update.
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September 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Great chapters. I love how they are working everything.
Can't wait for more.
Can't wait for more.
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September 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
More need more this is so great need to know what happens next
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September 18, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I hope Harry can get the elder wand from Dumbledore. I love this story so much! Cant wait for more!
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September 18, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait for Harry and Tom to get married!! :D