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May 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Really good, but it will be even better betaed, but I can understand that sometimes it is hard to find a good beta. Please continue when you have time.
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May 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love it can't wait for an update!!!!!!
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February 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love this story and can't wait to read more
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February 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
will do though at the moment, it's a bit like watching anime with bad english subs, i sort of get what your saying but some of the words aren't quite right.
i wish sal could see it from Har's side. If he doesn't go back and voldi takes over, all har cares about will die.
i wish sal could see it from Har's side. If he doesn't go back and voldi takes over, all har cares about will die.
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February 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Interesting plot line. But you have GOT to get better at writing. Your grammar is absolutely terrible at times. You get phrases wrong and your past/present tense needs work. It too often for a decent read. Other than that your sentence structure is decent as well as your dialogue. I recommend getting a beta reader.
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February 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I like you fic, I never read a fic of this paring...but it
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February 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
it's a good story and a fun idea but please, please PLEASE watch those typos, they really kill it. hmmmm, i dunno if har will go for it, he has to fight voldi after all.
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January 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting premise...I have to admit that it is so captivating that I wait with great excitement...great job!
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January 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wow, that's one messed up future past thing... i hope you can keep track of it because even when it's realatively straight forward, it's still confusing. Why would Sal breed with the half blood Har though? wasn't he all blood purity and blah blah? And he's willing to accept half blood tom as his heir?