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January 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
That's my Lord!!! :D
And, eeewwwww! I don't like Harry like that, and the thought of her having sex with him is actually more disgusting than Ron!! *cleaning brain with LOADS of soap*
And, eeewwwww! I don't like Harry like that, and the thought of her having sex with him is actually more disgusting than Ron!! *cleaning brain with LOADS of soap*
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January 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hermione is getting better.
When will we actually have the DL and Hermione actually together interacting with each other?
When will we actually have the DL and Hermione actually together interacting with each other?
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January 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Finally! Le sigh. For some reason, I wasn't allowed to review again and I got really frustrated with the disappearing of everything I tried to post, or when I pressed review, I just got some blank page with nothing. But now I see a box. *keeps fingers crossed*
I just want to thank you for your explanation. It's actually quite a relief. I'm not sure the warning was necessary if it were because of Harry playing a large role in the story. I'd just said that or left it out entirely since I personally prefer some plot in a story and it's not often you can write something substantial with only the two main characters.
Speaking of one of the main characters, you already had Hermione undertake a bit of action by asking Snape, but I still find her acting a bit too resigning to what's happening to her. If I were you, I'd have her plot and scheme and research more when she's not in contact with either LV or HP. I understand you're going for her being overwhelmed by them due to that connection when she's with them, so personality changes then are suitably explained, but Hermione's a very sneaky person. She finds ways around things. Considering her intelligence, it stands to reason she should be able to, at least, outsmart Harry and get some time away from him (glamours; stunning spells; potions; invisibility charms; whatever).
Also, Dumbledore didn't want Molly to know because it would be upsetting to her? I take it he wants to keep it a secret, but surely, others should see the changes in Harry and Hermione's behaviour and start asking questions. I'm not quite getting this line of thinking. Who is it supposed to help? LV?
I'm guessing Harry's acting the way he is due to the Horcrux influencing him. I'm assuming in your story Voldemort realised that's what their connection is and he uses it to push Hermione away from Harry by having him act this way and taking over in those moments? I recall you add a glimmer of redness in Harry's gaze at some point. I do agree with Atlantean Diva that it feels like the change is going too fast (and with too little resistance of Harry himself) to the reader, but that can be because we don't have all the information yet. So, I'm holding my judgement off on that and see whether we get an explanation at a later moment.
Oh ... getting some in later chapter, however, it's got one huge plothole: "Granger you put entirely to much faith in the boy, he barely attempted to stop the Dark Lord when his mind was being possessed, what makes you think he will put effort into stopping something he sees as natural emotions? You forget that he does not believe that the Dark Lord can effect him now." - The only reason Harry thinks LV can't affect him is because Dumbledore said so. So why is Dumbledore not correcting this? It's not in his interest to have Harry push Hermione away with this behaviour. And Harry would surely listen to Dumbledore telling him this.
If you're going with Snape being on the DL side and thus not informing AD that the connection is open, it makes no sense for him to give this info to Hermione at all since she can easily relay it to Dumbledore or others who'd tell Dumbledore. Harry might be rash, but he's not stupid. Hermione herself might not be able to convince him but Dumbledore should be.
"I was not promising that Voldemort would triumph against Harry at the end of the story because of the power Hermione would give him." - Oh noes, another one of those A/Ns that you never see in Snapiones, Luciones or Dramiones - they always triumph in the end. *teasing wink* I don't mind LV losing though (*hides in secure facility*), but you'd best not let Serp read this A/N. *wicked sniggering*
Hmmm... I'm looking forward to read more. Loving the smut. XDDD
I just want to thank you for your explanation. It's actually quite a relief. I'm not sure the warning was necessary if it were because of Harry playing a large role in the story. I'd just said that or left it out entirely since I personally prefer some plot in a story and it's not often you can write something substantial with only the two main characters.
Speaking of one of the main characters, you already had Hermione undertake a bit of action by asking Snape, but I still find her acting a bit too resigning to what's happening to her. If I were you, I'd have her plot and scheme and research more when she's not in contact with either LV or HP. I understand you're going for her being overwhelmed by them due to that connection when she's with them, so personality changes then are suitably explained, but Hermione's a very sneaky person. She finds ways around things. Considering her intelligence, it stands to reason she should be able to, at least, outsmart Harry and get some time away from him (glamours; stunning spells; potions; invisibility charms; whatever).
Also, Dumbledore didn't want Molly to know because it would be upsetting to her? I take it he wants to keep it a secret, but surely, others should see the changes in Harry and Hermione's behaviour and start asking questions. I'm not quite getting this line of thinking. Who is it supposed to help? LV?
I'm guessing Harry's acting the way he is due to the Horcrux influencing him. I'm assuming in your story Voldemort realised that's what their connection is and he uses it to push Hermione away from Harry by having him act this way and taking over in those moments? I recall you add a glimmer of redness in Harry's gaze at some point. I do agree with Atlantean Diva that it feels like the change is going too fast (and with too little resistance of Harry himself) to the reader, but that can be because we don't have all the information yet. So, I'm holding my judgement off on that and see whether we get an explanation at a later moment.
Oh ... getting some in later chapter, however, it's got one huge plothole: "Granger you put entirely to much faith in the boy, he barely attempted to stop the Dark Lord when his mind was being possessed, what makes you think he will put effort into stopping something he sees as natural emotions? You forget that he does not believe that the Dark Lord can effect him now." - The only reason Harry thinks LV can't affect him is because Dumbledore said so. So why is Dumbledore not correcting this? It's not in his interest to have Harry push Hermione away with this behaviour. And Harry would surely listen to Dumbledore telling him this.
If you're going with Snape being on the DL side and thus not informing AD that the connection is open, it makes no sense for him to give this info to Hermione at all since she can easily relay it to Dumbledore or others who'd tell Dumbledore. Harry might be rash, but he's not stupid. Hermione herself might not be able to convince him but Dumbledore should be.
"I was not promising that Voldemort would triumph against Harry at the end of the story because of the power Hermione would give him." - Oh noes, another one of those A/Ns that you never see in Snapiones, Luciones or Dramiones - they always triumph in the end. *teasing wink* I don't mind LV losing though (*hides in secure facility*), but you'd best not let Serp read this A/N. *wicked sniggering*
Hmmm... I'm looking forward to read more. Loving the smut. XDDD
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January 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm getting rather annoyed with Harry...
And wait, that wasn't a dream???
And wait, that wasn't a dream???
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January 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Yes, it was very short, but the updates are thankfully very frequent. :)
I'm glad to hear that this is not one of those deceiving Tomiones :D
I'm glad to hear that this is not one of those deceiving Tomiones :D
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January 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
"Note: The sub-catagory I've placed this story in does not necessarily present the outcome of the fiction." - You're not the first, and alas you won't be the last, to screw us LV-HG fans over like that. At least you have the decency to warn us beforehand that we don't have to bother reading this fic. I just wish the authors of these fics would post them in the list of the pairing they will go for. I never see it happening in the Snapione, Dramione or Lucione section that Hermione starts of with them and then, at the end, low and behold, she hooks up with Neville and lives happily ever after with him.
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January 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
>_> If I was in such a situation, I would have gone mad.
On the other hand, If I had to choose, I would choose the DL ;-)
She must be quite stressed out, poor girl.
And I must agree with Nerys. Why is it, that Dramione, Snapione and Lucione ALWAYS end like that, while many Tomione fics end with Harmony or Romione or Snapione being the end pairing. >_<
On the other hand, If I had to choose, I would choose the DL ;-)
She must be quite stressed out, poor girl.
And I must agree with Nerys. Why is it, that Dramione, Snapione and Lucione ALWAYS end like that, while many Tomione fics end with Harmony or Romione or Snapione being the end pairing. >_<
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January 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is the same review of chapter two, but I had to fix the glaring errors.
I thought I would like this after reading the first chapter because I like Tomione, but I can't deal with a sniveling Hermione, and Harry's change happened entirely to fast. You should have let his darkside build up instead of plopping it down like a bolder only two chapters into the story.
It's not perfect but better.
I thought I would like this after reading the first chapter because I like Tomione, but I can't deal with a sniveling Hermione, and Harry's change happened entirely to fast. You should have let his darkside build up instead of plopping it down like a bolder only two chapters into the story.
It's not perfect but better.
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January 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
"weak stomachs, beware" - no kidding dude!
It just isn't really fitting for Harry to think like that, and Hermione would normally be stronger, and not accept this. Greater good or not.
Run, Mione, run!
It just isn't really fitting for Harry to think like that, and Hermione would normally be stronger, and not accept this. Greater good or not.
Run, Mione, run!
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January 1, 2012 at 12:00 AM
i am really excited! i love the beginning of the story so far and i really look forward to more lots more and i am liking how things are going and how you have got the characters personalities so far and i am looking forward to all the others as well!!! i do hope that you will post soon and regularly!!!