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Add more chapters please

I like it! please the chapter seven!!! :)

OMG this was so hot, particularly Lupin! Normally in these Voldemort-won type of fics he is killed off so I love how he's being used here. And Hermione is very hot in this too ;)

Love the story but there is one thing, your writing in future tense alot
For example you wrote "Without anyone getting close to her, Hermione would be released and she would also collapse" when this should actually be "Without anyone getting close to her, Hermione was released and she also collapse"

wow very interesting

the story is interesting but I the way you write this is a little awkward. You keep saying Hermione WOULD walk down the hall. And I am like she will do that later, like in the future? It's confusing. You should say something like she walked down the hall. You use would all the time and it makes the story feel a little dis-jointed.

Also I feel like Hermione has fallen for voldemort very quickly. One minute they are raping her and he is shoving his penis down her throat the next she is upset about him being with other women... it is a little odd that she would suddenly become attached to the man who is sharing her with all his friends. Also if he was trying to breed with her, as you put it, than wouldn't he NOT want to share her for fear she would conceive one of his followers' children.

and the next man will be Snape????? Good fic

I noticed in the movie when he first transformed and Hermione called his name she almost got through to him. This might be a good idea to expand on so he doesn't lose control during and rips her to shreds. Love this story!

Bravo yet again! Cant wait for the next update!!

*applaused* this is such a good fic! I think you did a good job with this chapter. Please keep up the good work :)