rate_review Reviews

I so loved this story!

Hey, so I got most of the way through your story so far and to be honest I'm finding it hard to finish. It's very well written, and the plot is great! But what's bugging me is you have this set with Umbridge, which was year five. So they should all be fifteen. And yet you have Draco five months from his majority when Lucius dies, which happens when a wizard turns seventeen. Even if he was about to become sixteen, which is pleasurable for year five, I am so confused as to where that year went. Also, at one point you say Harry is only a few months from his majority as well, again where did that year and a half go, as we know Harry's birthday is in the summer and turns 16 after his fifth year finishes. This glaring irregularity is bugging the crap out of me. Also, what was the point of throwing in the animagus stuff if none of them, save one instance from Harry, ever use the skill. It seems like a complete waste of time for you to write, as well as a glaring plot hole for the reader. I just think you need to read over your work carefully before posting, or even have a beta read it....

Really had a good time reading your story. You managed to weave a wonderful tale together. Harry kept getting stronger & more confident. I liked that Voldemort being vanquished wasn't an epic battle. Rather the well scripted action scene you wrote. Severus was an interesting character. One who seemed to tolerate all things Harry once he was in love. I rather liked your Snape character.

The only person who didn't end up "happily ever after" was Lady Malfoy. Though now that she didn't have the threat of the abusive husband she was happy.

Thanks for the entertaining story.

Definitely one of the best Harry/Snape stories out there. So glad that I found this. I have to tell you that I absolutely adored the way you wrote Luna. :)

I just have to tell you that I had no problem with how long the ritual was because it was absolutely beautiful and inspiring. :)

I'm reviewing Chapter 16. I quite prefer a bit of plot with my porn, and you've done a lovely job so far. :) I look forward to finishing the fic.

I am liking the story. I look forward to reading more.

I absolutely loved this story. Filled with believable plot, suspense, humor, and lots of my favorite couple! Cant wait to see what the two of you think of next!!

I just wanted to say that I finished reading this (took me a few days) and I thought it was wonderful! Quite imaginative and very different than anything else out there. Kudos to you for that!

As a critique though, I would suggest a beta to go over your work. I did notice some spelling errors littered throughout, grammar issues and punctuation problems. There wasn't enough to detract from the story but it would give it a wonderful polish and shine that wasn't there before.

Overall, it was a most enjoyable read! Thank you for sharing it!

that was a lovely winter solstice ritual where did you find it? i like the story so far. i just thought i would review that I liked that chapter.