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September 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Excellent improvements. Before we didn't even know who was in the room with Severus and it left the reader to assume who it might be. Question--if this isn't meant to be a oneshot, why do you have it listed as one in the summary? Again, I must point out that you really should consider a beta reader. This isn't meant as an insult, but it's only to improve your good writing. Thanks for the review you left on my story. Please update when you can. I'm looking forward to seeing what you have in store for us.