rate_review Reviews

Sleep well, Master.

Really enjoyed the story, about to move on to the sequel. One note though about spelling. "Prostrate" is a position of the body, generally lying flat on the floor. "Prostate" is a sexual organ in the male body that causes pleasure during anal sex. The extra "r" was used regularly throughout your story.

That was great. I loved the last line of the story. Thanks for sharing and I'll be looking for further stories from you in the future.

I've said it before and I'll do so again--You have a real great flare for the sex scenes! Excellent eroticism. The sexual tension could be cut with a knife! Great job.

This story is so damn hot. Love Harry/Draco/Snape...
Poor Draco for only being able to watch...must be horrible. Can't wait for Draco to take part of it all.
Kee up the good work

Great new chapter. You have a real flare for the sex scenes. Try to update when you can.

Good second chapter. It was a bit on the small side, but if this works for you--great. There were some small grammatical errors, but nothing that couldn't be easily fixed and/or overlooked. Overall, it was okay. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

First of all, it says WIP in the summary so I have no idea why...certain people...think that it was a oneshot, it might have said that beforehand, but it doesn't right now. Second, sure there were grammer errors, I doubt everyone has perfect grammer so I barely noticed the occasional mistake, especially since the story still flowed and sounded right to me as a reader. And Lastly, I think this story is absolutely amazing so far, I like how the characters are a little OOC but not to a crazy extent. Keep up the good work!

Good third chapter. I like the way it's going. I can't wait to see what's going to happen next.

On a side note, I'd like to point out that I asked the question about the "one-shot" when it was still in the description of the story. It's since been corrected. As far as the comment about the grammar, I did point out that it was either easily correctable or ignored. No, I never meant this to be a comment on the perfection of my own grammar. You know, Unknownxcelebrity, until you made it a point to review to mostly slam my unbiased review, I was the only one posting comments. I wasn't flaming the story, of which I think it's a good one and have said as much. Let's be there to support the writer, not by slamming others, but actually giving them clear cut, well worded reviews that doesn't tear someone else down in the posting. If you don't like my reviews, don't read them. They aren't meant for you anyway. Thank you and have a nice day.

The story is good, but it feels rather incomplete. I don't know if you intended for there to be more to the story or not, but it leaves the reader hanging as it doesn't seem to answer any questions. You might want to see if the entire story downloaded. If it hasn't, that would explain a lot. If it has, you might want to consider adding to it. You might think about getting a beta reader while you're at it. Even the best of fanfiction writers have them. Like I said, this is a good story, so please whatever you do, don't think this is a flamer. I don't intend for it to be. Thanks for sharing your story and have a great day.