rate_review Reviews

I liked the idea :)

However, the actual writing leaves a bit to be desired! Just general grammar! The characters ARE a little off BUT what would be the point of a FANFICTION if they are all exactly the same? So keep going with that!

Please do update soon!
-MooChew

Interesting start, and a great concept. But the characters don't seem... right. Some of the grammar is wrong, but it's readable, except for the erratic behaviour of the characters. For example, Dumbledore shouting so easily, and seeming less reserved. And Harry's thoughts seem quite random and personal.
I'm sorry for a mostly negative comment, but I just hope it helps. Keep writing, I can see a lot of potential in this.

I liked this chapter a lot...Mmm hot, horny Remus and Sirius....Love it Xx

Another good chapter, I laughed out loud at the thought of Severus telling Harry to wank to relieve frustration. I look forward to the next.Xx

I want to read more of the diary...A great start Xx