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October 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
let me guess ron going to be a jerk,,like he is in every story. dont know why people have to write him that way.
he a good guy
he a good guy
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October 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Poor Hermione. Hope things work out. If a guy I like doesn't show any interest in me I don't sweat it and move on. But I hope she makes him jealous cuz if he can't realize how special she is then he isn't worth it. Update again soon please.
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October 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Very nice chapter! Poor Hermione. I hope that everything works out.
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October 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I like this story and I am looking forward to reading more of it please update when you can.
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October 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ooh ooh love it
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October 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hard to believe Snape would dance. But good update. Hope to see more soon.
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September 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Awsome (wonder whose at the door?) =)
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September 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. Wonder what happened. Update again soon please and I will return. :)
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September 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I have to admit from your authors note at the end of chapter one(I think)it sounded like it would be a bash on Ron story - you just sounded so happy that his name wasn't listed it came off as a preparation for Ron Bash 2011. Which I do not particularly enjoy, I think it's a plot point that's WAY overused, and so try to avoid those stories. However, I decided to give it a couple more chapters, probaly to wait until Severus was introduced to decide whether to continue or not.
I hate A/N's. Unless they are to translate a language that I don't speak into one that I do or to explain some historical or literary reference that the reader may not be familiar with I usually skip them(I have written this particual part of my review about eight times and this is what I am going to stick with, I really hope this whole thing doesn't come across as mean spirited - because I really don't mean any of it that way. Just giving my opinion and what I hope is some constructive criticism). For some reason authors like to put spoilers into their A/N's and it bugs me a little. Of course, I am now assuming that Ron is dead - I suppose it's possible that Lucius just can't bear to spit out the name of a Weasley...
Ah well, guess I'll just have to keep reading, then.
I'm willing to give it a bit more, but I am not a huge fan of the super short chapters, I usually don't read anything with less than 1000 words/chapter. Personally, I'd rather wait a week between updates and be able to read something more substantial - however, I understand that some people enjoy a different style.
Other than the above things, I think your story is well written and has the start of a good plot. I look forward to your next chapter.
I hate A/N's. Unless they are to translate a language that I don't speak into one that I do or to explain some historical or literary reference that the reader may not be familiar with I usually skip them(I have written this particual part of my review about eight times and this is what I am going to stick with, I really hope this whole thing doesn't come across as mean spirited - because I really don't mean any of it that way. Just giving my opinion and what I hope is some constructive criticism). For some reason authors like to put spoilers into their A/N's and it bugs me a little. Of course, I am now assuming that Ron is dead - I suppose it's possible that Lucius just can't bear to spit out the name of a Weasley...
Ah well, guess I'll just have to keep reading, then.
I'm willing to give it a bit more, but I am not a huge fan of the super short chapters, I usually don't read anything with less than 1000 words/chapter. Personally, I'd rather wait a week between updates and be able to read something more substantial - however, I understand that some people enjoy a different style.
Other than the above things, I think your story is well written and has the start of a good plot. I look forward to your next chapter.
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September 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Snape arrives I'm guessing