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March 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh vicious! Not exactly sure what that potion did, a variant of the pepper-up? Like a sleeping potion, but not dreamless sleep? Want to make sure I understand, LOL. Must be stronger than a sleeping spell in any case. I find myself proud of this Draco, after such a reaction to his father in the Forest of Dean, I was afraid he wouldn't be able to fight him; glad to be proven wrong. He did well, and I'm proud of Harry letting Draco stand up for himself and not intervening. Another wonderful chapter, I await the next.
Leania
Leania
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March 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I see too much describing & the chapter starts to become long winded...
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About #33...
I have to say, go Draco! I think this is the second time in a long time, for me,
that I've read a story where Draco actually stepped up to the plate and out-dueled
someone...as a teenager and not as an adult or Auror.
But, when are we goingto get into the intense romance between Draco & Harry???
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About #33...
I have to say, go Draco! I think this is the second time in a long time, for me,
that I've read a story where Draco actually stepped up to the plate and out-dueled
someone...as a teenager and not as an adult or Auror.
But, when are we goingto get into the intense romance between Draco & Harry???
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March 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
... well, that bodes bad things.
still, i'm glad har pulled Klein up on her attitude. not good enough really. A treaty does not a sentient species make.
looking forward to the next chappie.
still, i'm glad har pulled Klein up on her attitude. not good enough really. A treaty does not a sentient species make.
looking forward to the next chappie.
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March 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Whoa. I can't wait to see what happens next!
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March 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Well, that was unexpected! The real Lucius and Pansy popping up was probably the last thing that Harry and Draco needed. The wolfwere isn't going to be really happy about that. It is nice to see Draco showing more life now that he's finally able to see his mother. And Harry's right. It was always there... Draco just never had to call on it like he does now. Azkaban sounds more horrible than I ever imagined. Bleak isn't a strong enough word, and I hope that Harry *does* do something to make changes in the prison. It's worse than a third world country's prison system. Shame that Wizarding standards are so behind Muggle... Next chapter, yes? ~^
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March 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
about #32...
*shakes head*...and she leaves us hanging again!
By the way, I liked the atmosphere you built up in this
chapter with the description of how Azkaban looked inside.
It added to the chapter made it more foreboding, as a matter of
fact I noticed you don't build the scenes up anymore like you used
to in the past, with intense imagery. Why?
If you don't mind me saying...is it too much trouble? Because when
I think about it, it seems like they are few & far between now.
*shakes head*...and she leaves us hanging again!
By the way, I liked the atmosphere you built up in this
chapter with the description of how Azkaban looked inside.
It added to the chapter made it more foreboding, as a matter of
fact I noticed you don't build the scenes up anymore like you used
to in the past, with intense imagery. Why?
If you don't mind me saying...is it too much trouble? Because when
I think about it, it seems like they are few & far between now.
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March 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Honestly what was Harry expecting? Of course Draco was going to do something stupid and so he has.
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March 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh boy, was this a trap then? Seems like it...*shudders* I don't know what's worse, a mad Lucius, a mental mad Narcissa, or a pissed off Harry. I'm hoping Draco keeps with this backbone he seems to be gaining, and I wonder what the wolfwere is going to do. It obviously knew something was happening if just mere moments before Lucius appeared. What happens next?! I await the next chapter.
Leania
Leania
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March 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hm, I really can't say who I feel more for, Harry or Draco. If I understand this spell correctly, when Lucius dies, so does Narcissa? It would be great for her, I guess, but it would leave poor Draco an orphan. And he manages to get Gregory back as a friend and then ignores Harry? Although, the kiss was nice, if not unexpected. And what the hell does the wolfwere think it's going to do with the three humans? Next chapter, please! ~ Mako
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March 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
about #31...
1. And, uh, I think I'm doing a mystery story right now with 'Writ on Water.'
--No..no. I'm not talking about the CSI type of drama/mystery you're doing now, I'm
talking ole' school mystery, like 'Ten Little Indians' & 'Clue', where you have a
small group of people and you have to guess who in the group is the killer, because
of the constant misdirection. Like the type of misdirection you did in 'Keep It Simple
Stupid', without the humor.
2. By the way, at this point in the story, what is the theme? Because you usually have
one subtly tucked in the story.
1. And, uh, I think I'm doing a mystery story right now with 'Writ on Water.'
--No..no. I'm not talking about the CSI type of drama/mystery you're doing now, I'm
talking ole' school mystery, like 'Ten Little Indians' & 'Clue', where you have a
small group of people and you have to guess who in the group is the killer, because
of the constant misdirection. Like the type of misdirection you did in 'Keep It Simple
Stupid', without the humor.
2. By the way, at this point in the story, what is the theme? Because you usually have
one subtly tucked in the story.