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The last scene was HOT, my ovaries probably did an Ollie.
Dude you are amazing ( and mighty pervy by the looks of it )
Time for another wankathon! :D

Please continue

I absolutely loved reading your story. The plotline was very good. Several things though. One (which is entirely me) I am not very fond of the overly dramatic rape scenes. Some variation of fuck doesn't necessarily have to be every other word. Personally, I thought the dirty talk and fuck usage were slightly overdone. And I'm not fond of the phrase bubble butt. Especially not when describing a guy.

Second thing. You could benefit GREATLY from a beta reader. There were quite a few places in the story where I found things that weren't right. And several that I flat out had no idea what you were trying to say because of typos. Other than that, I really did like the story. Or what I've read so far if it's not done. :3

Okay so I am actually starting to like this especially now that there is a chance Tom will try and make up with Harry but I was wondering if you could also do beast later.

I know not everyone is into it but I can't help it myself when a beast dominates a human in fics or an anthro and will this eventually do Harry with other Death Eaters in the future with a willing Harry because there are no slut Harry's that have Harry willingly with the Dark side later on

Also have you considered making this a creature fic because if so I would suggest a succubus or lamiae for Harry mostly the lamiae because that way you can say they don't come into a creature inheritance until after they have sex and since they both feed off of sex then you can use that as an excuse to have Harry with other DE's or creatures while still focusing on Voldemort/Harry after all it does seem like it might take awhile for it to develop into something more and if Voldemort (or Tom however you look at it) refuses to let Harry return to the muggles then that will be a good way to begin the recovery.

These are just some suggestions and hopes but I am not telling you that is how the story should go but I am hoping for it, also if you do use BEAST can you make it so it is a male beast and not say Nagini maybe Buckbeak and some centaurs and Fenrir.

Still you might have your own ideas already played out so sorry if this is intruding

wow, that's really messed up. So does this mean Gin's alive and okay and such. Also, has Dumbles broken out the search parties yet and is poor Ron still stuck in the Chamber?
So many questions, not the least of which is, where the heck did Tom go.

Eh? Tom Riddle would never be this weak to someone just sprouting things to him, even if they are true.

Also, a bit too descriptive of rimming, isn't it? (Not that it bothers me ;) )

well, that's one way to make sure it's a rape. The fall out is going to be shocker.