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August 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
let the angsty meldodrama commence. ^^
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July 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oooooooooooooh dear. this is gonna cause problems.
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July 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This story sounds like its going to be great!!! A very promising plot.
However, there are two grammar issues I would like to point out and I hope you take my advice. First, type out numbers like TWO.Don't use 2. It makes it seem like you don't care much about your own grammar. Its okay for things like "3 hours later", but not within the story itself. Second, and this probably isn't your fault, a lot of people don't know it. When a new person starts speaking, that is automatically the beginning of a new paragraph. Otherwise, it can cause confusion over who the actual speaker is.
I hope you see this as nothing more than constructive criticism and friendly advice. I'll be looking forward to the next update!
Feel free to email me. nekluvshp@hotmail.com
However, there are two grammar issues I would like to point out and I hope you take my advice. First, type out numbers like TWO.Don't use 2. It makes it seem like you don't care much about your own grammar. Its okay for things like "3 hours later", but not within the story itself. Second, and this probably isn't your fault, a lot of people don't know it. When a new person starts speaking, that is automatically the beginning of a new paragraph. Otherwise, it can cause confusion over who the actual speaker is.
I hope you see this as nothing more than constructive criticism and friendly advice. I'll be looking forward to the next update!
Feel free to email me. nekluvshp@hotmail.com
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July 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Very good start, but the flow was a little rocky. I like the idea, but a part of me is confused, are they at a muggle college or are you making it a wizard college(It seemed that way since you used the term Mediwizard to describe nurse)? I really can't wait for this to continue i just LOVE bottom!Draco Mpregs :DD