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Also forgot to mention that I'd love to beta for you! I've done it before for some authors who became inactive, and I'm a writer myself. I'm currently running ideas in my head for new fanfics and do need someone to chat with as well, so I think it'd be cool to correspond with you. email me to let me know what you think and if you have any questions. In case it doesn't come on the site my email is bittersweet_mis@hotmail.co.uk

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I really like your concept and am enjoying the story so far. I love the twins and their interaction with Harry. The shift between dialogue and thoughts is a little confusing though. There were several times that I had to stop and reread sections to figure out if people were talking or thinking.

this is interesting. If you're mentioning mates, does that mean this is a creature fic? And if harry has a mate/mates where does that leave the twins? I think i need a bit more info before i cast a vote... and to see what the characters well characters are like. I'd hate to tie Har to death eater mode Luc or Snape the prick or draco the uppity, supremest snob.

ron did not leave out of jeasule and fear, one he was injured, two in occulmoly was not as good as harry and hermoine, the locket play with him the most becosue he love hermoine and was afraid that she did not love him. the locket could not play hermoine saying ron love harry, and harry was never in love with hermoine, plus ron only left for a minute then tried to come back, was captured then the magic would not let him in find it again. he still save harry life, fought off a death eather, and help with the war.

I vote for

Harry/Fenrir

Harry/Voldemort (I just feel that when doing a dark Harry there should be a connection to Voldemort and if it is not a pairing then Voldemort should be his grandfather or father)

Draco/Hermione

keep up the good work and is any vote available because I have a few strange pairings I want to vote for such as

Hagrid/Harry (I like gay bears and I can't really see Hagrid as a bad guy like members of the Order in some Harry goes dark fics or a part of the Dark after what Riddle did so I would make him more neutral where he is still Harry's lover but doesn't take place in battles also they were close in the books)

Remus/Harry (I like gay incest and can you imagine a threesome between Fenrir/Remus/Harry),

Kingsley/Harry,

Firenze/Harry, (I know strange but I have a Beast/anthro kink)

Viktor Krum/Harry (I thought the movie version of him was hot)

Also some DE's if you keep there appearance cannon to the stories

Rodolphus/Harry (Bella never had a loving relationship with her husband and loved LV but Harry taking them both would either piss her off or if she is going to be a Harry supporter she can support the relationship)

Walden Macnair (the movie version is ugly but the book version sounds hot)

please let me know what you think in your next chapter or by email

A beta? really i would never guess you needed one. you are doing so well. Love the plot, cant wait for more. As or guessing of the mates I'm going to guess Fred, George, Draco, (five right? and all male?) I almost want to say Neville and Snape. Really there are no indications but thats ok, it's more fun to find out as you write. Hmmm For Hermione I love seeing her with Blaise they can just be so cute and as Blaise is kind of an unknown personalitly wise as he came in so late and was ever overly writen he can be..twisted...to suit your story!

Oh and I would like to give you a warning- I am also writing a Harry Potter story with mulipal mates and...the sex scene (which ended up writing itself) ended up being 5 pages of kink...beware of the crazy kinky plot bunnies ;) have fun!

Please update again soon- there are so many questions!

Kit

If Harry goes dark the twins will have to go with him, they can't be broken apart. Ginni would do will on the darkside, there's already some darkness there, and she could be a good match for Draco. I think Hermione would do well with someone older, but I don't know who will be with Harry and who will be left over, so I can't say much. You have a lot of thinking and 'thinking' with very little "talking" and too much thinking. So, what's next?? Can there be mpreg??? Maybe knock Harry up a little??? Just asking. Please update soon.

hmmm...pairing for hermione. i don't see it often, but how about neville? he's a quieter, level headed sort that isn't afraid ot be fierce when he needs to be,and hermione can help with his self confidence. as for the five mates, could sev be one? and/or lucius?

I'm all for threesome, as long as Draco is nowhere near it! (I hate the prat)

About Ron... two slips (due to jealousy and Horcux) and people are against him saying he's hateful, I don't get it... I really don't. Pairing... any chance of Harry/Voldemort/Bill?

There are a LOT of questions and one huge cliff... Hope you update soon, can't wait to see where your headed.